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A holiday warning (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
While shopping the malls beware the walls that sit atop eighteen wheels. For if you can't I'm sure you shan't be fearing the beige and teals.

Up the ladder: wax
Down the ladder: Caged

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.285714
Weighted score: 4.807899
Overall Rank: 11030
Posted: December 15, 2002 1:18 PM PST; Last modified: December 15, 2002 6:19 PM PST
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[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Dec-02/5:20 PM | Reply
alright. damnit, this needs immediate surgery for if you can't, i'm sure you shan't be fearing the biege and teals.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > Bachus | 15-Dec-02/6:16 PM | Reply
righto,'tis done.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > INTRANSIT | 15-Dec-02/6:22 PM | Reply
a most excellent suggestion, good Sir Knight. and thank you.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > INTRANSIT | 15-Dec-02/10:18 PM | Reply
are you out of your mind! i was kidding, i see what patti meant by calling you gullible. no sweat. i'm worse trust me...okay.. i see your structure, now they are built that way to either contrast one another (the stanzas) and then resolve, or go from birth to sudden unexpected death (in story sense) example;

While shopping the store
beware of the poor
That are clipping tags under rags

For if you can't
I'm sure you shan't
Put your clothes with wynona's bags (just kidding lol)
Find their clothes in one of your bags
or stuff your clothes in one of their bags..it's endless
and you can mix it up for days! you can start a series.

[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.189.171 > horus8 | 16-Dec-02/6:13 AM | Reply
Thanks for the comments people. I'ts just about not paying attention to what you are doing. thats all. I'm really sorry everyone spent their time on this. It's a throw-away. geez Y'all know I can do better. 10-4?
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > INTRANSIT | 16-Dec-02/2:01 PM | Reply
time is what i have, and yes i know you can.
[0] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.178 | 15-Dec-02/6:23 PM | Reply
This sucks.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > poetandknowit | 15-Dec-02/6:26 PM | Reply
not tonight dear, I have a headache.
[0] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.178 > INTRANSIT | 15-Dec-02/6:34 PM | Reply
I did not ask for a suck or a fuck I just said your attempt at poetry sucked. Simple as that. 10-4?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 15-Dec-02/6:31 PM | Reply
beige and teal? you lost me.
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Dec-02/6:47 PM | Reply
bad christmas sweaters and socks? i think he meant bad colored clothing left on racks put into presents...forget it.
[5] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 | 15-Dec-02/9:13 PM | Reply
why? you give no reason. will i be arrested for buying hot merch off the back of one? are they poorly driven? are they forming a new hybrid-gang--sort of a C.H.U.D. but rubber and metal?
you must give flesh if you want grey to function. bones are not enough. your voice cannot be made out unless you speak. in complete thoughts.
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