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A holiday warning (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

While shopping the malls beware the walls that sit atop eighteen wheels. For if you can't I'm sure you shan't be fearing the beige and teals.

horus8 15-Dec-02/10:18 PM
are you out of your mind! i was kidding, i see what patti meant by calling you gullible. no sweat. i'm worse trust me...okay.. i see your structure, now they are built that way to either contrast one another (the stanzas) and then resolve, or go from birth to sudden unexpected death (in story sense) example;

While shopping the store
beware of the poor
That are clipping tags under rags

For if you can't
I'm sure you shan't
Put your clothes with wynona's bags (just kidding lol)
Find their clothes in one of your bags
or stuff your clothes in one of their bags..it's endless
and you can mix it up for days! you can start a series.





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