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15-Jan-03/11:25 PM |
warp. weft. heft. theft. those neurochemicals, they're fleet afoot.
dream a little dream of crocheted knees.
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| Re: Welsh Landscape Part One by Nicholas Jones |
16-Jan-03/8:32 AM |
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16-Jan-03/8:38 AM |
okay, the title makes it SO accessible, do you think it's too obvious now?
something like, 'asking for it, in a red cape'?
by the way, i think this is one of your finest. i have mostly stayed out of the comments because i felt i had nothing to add.
bullseye, mrs.g.
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16-Jan-03/9:01 AM |
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was this a confession? or do you want to shape it a little more? solid flesh on these bones, acc. but it need a little more shaping to be a good read to those not privvy to your soul.
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16-Jan-03/9:01 AM |
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| Re: Death by dougsoderstrom |
16-Jan-03/9:03 AM |
'blown' leaves the door open for more verse.
needs to be 'has blown' or 'blew'' methinks.
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| Re: Lianne by mindsigns |
16-Jan-03/9:04 AM |
damn. that is some kind of keening.
kudos, mindsigns
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16-Jan-03/9:06 AM |
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interesting foray. thanks for sharing.
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16-Jan-03/8:29 PM |
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| Re: Just clubbing fur seals by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
17-Jan-03/7:39 AM |
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who knew baby seals could be such tongue-tripping mind-fucking fun?
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| Re: dark angel is a whore by UAFANTHORPEY |
17-Jan-03/10:27 AM |
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you sir, are the discarded molt of a milk snake.
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| Re: In Winter by Bobjim |
17-Jan-03/12:01 PM |
so, you WANT a wanker award?
okay! you win!
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17-Jan-03/10:31 PM |
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i was really liking the way you playe with the structure, and transposed words--until the end! you will find it, richa. you are so very close now.
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19-Jan-03/12:14 PM |
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hysterical, o virtual egg!
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| Re: what little I know by nentwined |
19-Jan-03/7:19 PM |
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| Re: Dr. Skellington by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
20-Jan-03/6:57 AM |
why call it a villanelle when it's not? you've played that trick once already. it's not as funny the second time around.
but i like the poem.
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| Re: The Chastisement of Cupid by Thyme |
20-Jan-03/7:47 AM |
vivid and corporeal!
was it inspired by a painting?
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21-Jan-03/1:22 PM |
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21-Jan-03/1:24 PM |
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angry. good and angry. and good.
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| Re: Minoan lover by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
21-Jan-03/6:44 PM |
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this would make a fuck of a villanelle, h
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