regarding some deleted poem...	21-Jan-03/6:46 PM
she has no shield, and she's tossed off the veils (among other, more animate bits)...
Re: Jesus was a necromancer by horus8	22-Jan-03/5:20 PM
sorry, h. we all hate you now. ornella convinced us that you are bad. hear that tanya? you win! you can go away now; we don't like him any more. have a nine for your poem, well, because i know.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Jan-03/7:56 PM
why did you break the form? it was undulating, and you flattened it on the left, and it seems as though it was not intentional--just careless--regardless ofwhether it was or not. so, what are friends for, if not to call you on such matters?
Re: Starving at Tiffany's by horus8	24-Jan-03/7:13 AM
this is nicer than a little blue box tied up with a crisp white ribbon.
Re: The Other Side of Me by Quarton	24-Jan-03/7:56 AM
very nice indeed. this is the weakest point: ~ A tempter who could speak without debate, his opinions most convincingly. How he would talk--on and on incessantly, ~ ironically, the language is not convincing. i particularly like the way you begin this poem--as though your mask is a stranger. it does feel that way, at times. remember that you are the fabricator and the fabricatee. perhaps old age, and wisdom help us meld the two. i will not rank until you convince me. nice effort.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Jan-03/8:01 AM
a particular monarch-type-lady was famous for her insatiable appetities. she had a sling built for her favorite stud. yep, horse. it has even been rumored that she died when the sling broke: http://www.straightdope.com/classics/a1_109
Re: No more tears, or trail by Bachus	24-Jan-03/8:33 AM
DAMN YOU FOR MAKING ME THINK OF THE BROTHERS GIBB AT THIS UNGODLY HOUR!!! (shadow dancin', bay-bee you do it right...) (eat your heart out, nicholas jones!!!)
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Jan-03/8:44 AM
too obvious. good thought, but work it a little deeper. and lose about 6 of the somes.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Jan-03/11:43 AM
okay. the title is cliche. do you want that? or do you want this to be a specific person, and not a generalization? (hint!) are you talking to the man who smells of the perfume, or to a third party? keep it between 2 people--more intimate--and have the 'whore' reference be the outsider. or, make it between 2 women, bitter, and talking about a cheater-- He came home fragrant with some sad whore's expensive scent that a guy like him gave to sweeten the pang of his act something like that, maybe?
Re: Starving at Tiffany's by horus8	24-Jan-03/12:16 PM
work with me on the damn punctuation, h! you are getting tighter, so i will be harsher, since i'm good at the picky shit. so, CRACK!! tighten, boy! CRACK!!! and, you don't need the quotation marks on every occurance of the title. my sugg. is to make it a title once, and leave it as a description of a person the rest of the time.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Jan-03/12:17 PM
"Like film off a camera" like film from a camera? film falls off a proector reel, and out of a camera...
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Jan-03/10:04 PM
SHIELD THINE EYES! THE DARK TRIANGLE OF SHAME IS AFOOT!
Re: Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	28-Jan-03/8:17 AM
wrap it up, h. this needs one more. 2 is not complete. give trigamestus the triad treatment, and then i will vote. and it won't be a fucking 5.
Re: Pandora's box by Lynn	28-Jan-03/7:00 PM
damn. you are so on when you do this kind of thing. excellent modernization. fantastic twist. and then we were undone. you make me jealous, girl.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-03/7:03 PM
you are missing the stab. wound me, and let my blood be the red of her hem. i can almost see it. almost.
Re: Small Town Tavern by NinjaPoet	30-Jan-03/11:30 AM
you got me all heated up with a strong start...and then, well, nothing. you lost me at ac/dc. you lost 'it' then too. do over.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jan-03/1:09 PM
Quicky, now! Your shoes are on the Wronge feete! "I realised that the pub wasn't really a pub. It was the chasm of our own self-belief." Ande which Pubbe is not, Sirrah? You are losing your purplish Grippe on Mast'ry of the Obvious. This is weak, and not ready for pub-lick-aye-shin.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jan-03/1:10 PM
was she selling wind chimes for a church?
Re: Love spank by Shardik	31-Jan-03/8:34 AM
only if you'll buy me one of those 'silk' roses, with a 'teardrop' on them the next time you stop for diesel. sweetheart. now, did you want the maid, or the nurse?
Re: Me and My Girl by NinjaPoet	31-Jan-03/8:53 AM
or, for www.ratemypoo.com don't be shy. submit.