on His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger
23 Feb 2003, 4:59 AM
A good effort my young sire, however heartblink is a failed image it doesn't really work so amend it and consult me once you have finished. May I offer you respectability in a 7, quite moving.
on His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger
23 Feb 2003, 5:00 AM
I see your an amiable laddie, who kindly offers his comments would you oblige me sometime and grease my whip, onw would appreciate your input on mine
on The Voice of the Night (dedicated to Mr. PIG) by Sylvia Bravo
18 Feb 2003, 4:22 AM
How charming my dear, thank you this is wonderful god bless you
on some deleted poem
22 Feb 2003, 5:02 PM
This shows your consternation about something my dear, I do hope you are okay, love and thoughts MP.
Try and get some context and shape to it, your in my prayers tonight my dear.
Try and get some context and shape to it, your in my prayers tonight my dear.
on some deleted poem
12 Feb 2003, 8:22 AM
in parts sublimely told, in other parts (middle) you digress too much and lose the point -7-
on The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT
12 Feb 2003, 8:16 AM
your intro's are always your strongest asset, the last Stan seems rushed which is a shame for otherwise its a strong piece of lit....7
on some deleted poem
12 Feb 2003, 8:27 AM
Different I quite liked it.
Both are rather sticky but toffee is better, with sex you have the argument over who sleeps in the wet patch ..7
Both are rather sticky but toffee is better, with sex you have the argument over who sleeps in the wet patch ..7
on Starving at Tiffany's by horus8
12 Feb 2003, 8:31 AM
At last we meet sir I have read your work and like your sensitive pieces best, sarcasm is inferior to you only entertain it when the devil on your shoulder sits on its chip and teases the Angel for being so tedious.
By the way this is a keeper my young fry.....8
By the way this is a keeper my young fry.....8
on some deleted poem
12 Feb 2003, 8:54 AM
If pens had feelings they would cry ink for hours over this.
Use your imagination....4 lashes for you now stiffen those knees.
Use your imagination....4 lashes for you now stiffen those knees.
on some deleted poem
12 Feb 2003, 8:59 AM
So much to chew on here (excuse the pun) No, my dear friend this put the who in my ha. ....8.
I say well done
I say well done
on some deleted poem
20 Feb 2003, 12:10 PM
By the way I was just perusing Mr Horus work and his website and my oh my what a handsome prince he is. My darling other half made me feel most unattractive and one was not amused, I always have Enid from the dales though who finds me most fanciful and dandy.
on some deleted poem
20 Feb 2003, 12:07 PM
Ding Dong, I say !
this is wonderful.
But... My dear 'Obstinate' is the correct spelling however.
'There is love to be made' fits perfectly like a glove, and its such a pleasure to read such profoundly alluring poetry, my darling I salute you and kiss your fragrant hand that velvets the page with your genial brush of passion.
I know you must tire of the countless requests to read ones work, but if you would oblige me your opinion on the trilogy of haikus I have compiled I would be most honoured,
Thank you In advance. ...9...
this is wonderful.
But... My dear 'Obstinate' is the correct spelling however.
'There is love to be made' fits perfectly like a glove, and its such a pleasure to read such profoundly alluring poetry, my darling I salute you and kiss your fragrant hand that velvets the page with your genial brush of passion.
I know you must tire of the countless requests to read ones work, but if you would oblige me your opinion on the trilogy of haikus I have compiled I would be most honoured,
Thank you In advance. ...9...
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
19 Feb 2003, 5:05 AM
I say Sir, one may say this is an intersting read but the profane manner in which our most personal anatomical parts are described is awful, please stop watching hotel porn, My offer is a 5 marks lost on degrading penis
on some deleted poem
13 Feb 2003, 3:51 AM
You have captured the decadence of winter and the affect is has on ones emotions, a concept hard to achieve and you have done it magnificently -bravo I say, bravo
on some deleted poem
11 Feb 2003, 3:40 AM
thought this was very good the last stanza says it all >>>>9, shorten the middle if you can sir.
on Clown of Misery by nocturnalism
23 Feb 2003, 5:03 AM
Yes, Yes one can see a story unfolding here, Artificial smiles, so true this day and age. 6