Re: The sky is falling by INTRANSIT	8-Apr-03/9:30 AM
I did find the picture of the American and British soldiers quite hilarious of them 'chilling' on may say in his palace smoking.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Apr-03/9:39 AM
Art Garfunkel has a rival my dear.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Apr-03/9:47 AM
'Corn gold from its bed' adorable line. Your writing hints that you are a true pagan and you possess a munificent beauty of the descriptive. Writing of simple beauty is hard for we all fail to define it. You must show these to your children one day.
Re: War Begins on Tuesday by Nicholas Jones	10-Apr-03/9:53 AM
I have personally dusted down my bifocals to offer you a few curmudgeons on politicians, and Nicholas one hopes you enjoy them as much as I. 1) if President Bush has a straight penis, its the only part of his adminstration that is 2)They are nothing else but a load of kippers - 2 faced with no guts 3)Mothers want all their sons to become president but they dont want them to be politicians in the process. For now my dear boy, farewell.
Re: No Easy Way To Be Free by Bonehiss	10-Apr-03/10:02 AM
Stanza 3 is strong I do like it, however it just doesn't do enough to excite my literary erogenous zones. Try condensing these images, writing is a portrait of hard bristles and soft fingers, I see your angst and think you could do another draft, its not bad my darling
Re: Sorry for all the things by Mutant_X	11-Apr-03/8:08 AM
A good try at the suicide genre but the repetition and use of cliches adds nothing to our imagination as its a tell all poem, however I bequeath thee a 6.
Re: You are not me by Mutant_X	11-Apr-03/8:11 AM
I see the tenderness of age in your work. As you become more life experienced your writing will evolve as it is with your work at present, the naivity somewhat burdens any serious writing. We've all been there though so keep your pecker up. 5 I would be grateful if you would look at mine and offer me your views, Thank you.
Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT	11-Apr-03/8:17 AM
February's mother is cold and unforgiving, not like mine thank goodness. I like the line of the indian wind, I too have used similar connotations in my poem lovers lane, your work is often majestic but sometimes I think by shortening some of your work you deprive us of enough. Its hard to put more light on it, what do you think kind sir? 7
Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT	11-Apr-03/8:19 AM
I would love you to read a poem Richa wrote about butterflies, wonderful language, it inspired me for my next poem. Sorry if one appears a fringe intrusive, just trying to help you, because I think your a gentleman.
Re: You Left Me by Cali	11-Apr-03/8:21 AM
How does one pray with all there might? I am interested because surely one would injure ones self.
Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT	11-Apr-03/8:23 AM
Dear Mr In-transit. A formal request for you to please offer any thoughts on my recent posting. Kind Regards Laurence. aka Mr Pig
Re: Everything Counts by Lord Ganus	11-Apr-03/8:27 AM
Golly ! this was enjoyable and humourous because contracts are the epitomy of evil. In Eritrea one man had his hand severed for breach of a promise made to his son, his son severed his fathers hand with such ferocity it split the scabbard. Bravo 8
Re: To My Grave by Bonehiss	11-Apr-03/8:31 AM
Quite poignant, I liked the last Stza. (Does not deserve a 4)
Re: Dogwood Winter by Rex Karrs	11-Apr-03/8:33 AM
Its one of those to study I think. I will try and come back one day soon but for now I must retire for my bath.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Apr-03/8:35 AM
Oh there were so many Louis Of Francais, what was his penchant for ?
Re: Originality by shwenatjadeflower	11-Apr-03/8:39 AM
I enjoyed the opening but detest Marx, he used to scare me as a boy.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Apr-03/8:43 AM
Oh Jesus No ! tell me this is not true for Z is infinitely the damsel of femininity. I feel ill, I must fetch myself a brandy at once.
Re: The Gentleman by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Apr-03/9:05 AM
Very Humourous, you are a witty man and a 10 would be the mark of a proper gentleman.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Apr-03/9:09 AM
I repudiate that this is gross as someone said. I think this has unparalelled beauty, growing old (God Willing) is inevitable and filling his wrinkles with the purity of the big blue and power of the ocean makes me feel you have embraced this inevitability and made something perceived as repugnant very beautiful. I salute you, I am only in my thirties but felt humbled by this. May God keep us all. 10 Exquisite
Re: Bombs by Shardik	17-Apr-03/3:35 AM
Perfect my fellow. This says all it needs to say about war, powerful and conclusive my dear friend I am honoured to have read it. 10