| Re: Chickens by rnuk |
9-Aug-06/8:11 AM |
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Brilliant, simple and to the point. The ending is classic. Now I know about Marxism. Thanks.
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| Re: Bobjim, Jimbob by Spider-Man |
9-Aug-06/12:45 AM |
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I usually like disgusting humorous shit , but this one made me a little sick to my stomach, maybe that's the point.
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| Re: a comment on My First Hangover by mindsigns |
29-Mar-06/1:11 AM |
Nick at night-ish, I agree, so how else would you want to write a poem about long urinal excretion, gin hangovers and diarrhea...in the style of James Joyce maybe??? Or maybe Nietzsche??
I think a 7th grade style fits perfectly with these "fart joke" type of lyrics. So i guess I'm taking your comments as a complimient, Thanks!
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| Re: a comment on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer |
9-Mar-06/1:45 AM |
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There are a couple of original words of mine in there
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| Re: a comment on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns |
9-Mar-06/1:43 AM |
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Been there, done that...the problem is eventually i have to come back
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| Re: a comment on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns |
9-Mar-06/1:42 AM |
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3 was great, I could give or take 1 and 2, just start me off with 3 and plow right into the original trilogy
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| Re: a comment on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer |
7-Mar-06/11:03 PM |
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I guess I didn't ferment, fester or merge myself clearly enough, I revel in my embarrassment. For my derision's and ineptness are fostering and ultimately I dread & eschew myself. If only I could be more inconsolable, ominous and pensive then maybe I can bow down to your wisdom. My bedeviled self can only ask for your gracious forgiveness & accession and help me let go of my past discordance.
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| Re: a comment on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns |
7-Mar-06/10:33 PM |
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Unfortunately i wasn't trying to be cliche, it describes me to a tee , ( just replace Trek with Wars), everything else is pretty accurate. bummer
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| Re: Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer |
7-Mar-06/5:42 AM |
Sounds like your preaching to me, I hate lectures.
And I don't fancy looking up every other word you write in the dictionary, I'm a simple man and big word don't impress me.
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| Re: The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo |
16-Mar-04/12:36 AM |
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I like it but it doesn't read like a poem, at least until the last stanza, it reads more like a paragraph -- maybe that was your point - i still thought it was good
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| Re: what i see with strings by New Life Drug |
14-Mar-04/9:01 AM |
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It feels more like a run-on sentence than a poem, the images are too random=..some connect and some I just don't know...
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| Re: My Stigmata: "Psychotica" by SupremeDreamer |
14-Mar-04/8:55 AM |
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i think i need to study this more, there's alot there
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| Re: dear jim d. by peaceseeker |
14-Mar-04/8:47 AM |
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Too many quotation marks, me head hurts
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| Re: sonnet by hoopoe |
5-Mar-04/2:40 AM |
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| Re: a comment on April Showers by mindsigns |
19-Feb-03/5:49 AM |
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hey horus, there is more than one friggin kind of sonnet out there, they aren't all Shakespearian, though I did like yours. Mine wasn an attempt at creating my own style, you can say it sucks but don't say it failed
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| Re: a comment on April Showers by mindsigns |
18-Feb-03/12:07 PM |
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Nicholas, if the poem was about the month of april I'd agree, seeing i just finished shoveling 25 inches a nice fresh snow from the drive way, and hey it's still cold and windy in April too- just to remind you
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| Re: a comment on Lianne by mindsigns |
18-Jan-03/6:46 AM |
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