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dear jim d. (Free verse) by peaceseeker
when i catch a glimpse of my reflection the girl staring back at me is not the girl i imagine her to be in my reality i mean, she is not who i expect to see the same girl who loves being clean of green however, my inebriation is a distinct vacation from disentangling myself from the trap of a life that demands transcendence, now. and you, my sugar plum fairy of a guy keeping me at arms length with your passion not quite sure what to make of my affection "we'll see what happens" your sweet mantra i will sing to you bill withers "use me" with joy and in harmony with her "sexy" voice dance "tight" but as wild as a willow tree and let you go to live as free as me.

Up the ladder: Leading To Fatality
Down the ladder: SMS

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.285714
Weighted score: 5.345782
Overall Rank: 3420
Posted: March 14, 2004 7:10 AM PST; Last modified: March 14, 2004 7:10 AM PST
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[5] mindsigns @ 64.12.116.207 | 14-Mar-04/8:47 AM | Reply
Too many quotation marks, me head hurts
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 14-Mar-04/2:50 PM | Reply
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