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My First Hangover (Other) by mindsigns
Ow! My head is pounding Keep it down Don't make a loud sound. Ow! My world is spinning I still taste gin I'm going back to bed again. Then I keel over It's my first hangover. Oooh! A thousand minute pee Speak softly Call into work for me. Oooh! My stomach is in loops I must regroup My poop comes out like soup. Then I keel over It's my first hangover. Ahhh! I think it's gonna break No more headache I'm almost wide awake. Ahhh! I'm so thirsty Would you please Open a beer for me? Then I keel over It's my first hangover.

Up the ladder: The Escape
Down the ladder: Unmistakably Mistaken

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9682
Posted: March 28, 2006 5:10 AM PST; Last modified: March 28, 2006 5:10 AM PST
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[7] Bobjim @ 143.167.79.60 | 28-Mar-06/5:51 AM | Reply
Pretty good. Though I never get hangovers.
[8] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 28-Mar-06/6:26 AM | Reply
Heh--cute. There's nothing--NOTHING--worse than a gin-induced hangover. Ugh.
[5] matt door @ 65.32.138.73 | 28-Mar-06/7:33 PM | Reply
Did'nt know Nick-at-Night was holding a poetry contest.
This would win the 7th grade class by a hair.
[n/a] mindsigns @ 63.100.108.19 > matt door | 29-Mar-06/1:11 AM | Reply
Nick at night-ish, I agree, so how else would you want to write a poem about long urinal excretion, gin hangovers and diarrhea...in the style of James Joyce maybe??? Or maybe Nietzsche??
I think a 7th grade style fits perfectly with these "fart joke" type of lyrics. So i guess I'm taking your comments as a complimient, Thanks!
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