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My First Hangover (Other) by mindsigns

Ow! My head is pounding Keep it down Don't make a loud sound. Ow! My world is spinning I still taste gin I'm going back to bed again. Then I keel over It's my first hangover. Oooh! A thousand minute pee Speak softly Call into work for me. Oooh! My stomach is in loops I must regroup My poop comes out like soup. Then I keel over It's my first hangover. Ahhh! I think it's gonna break No more headache I'm almost wide awake. Ahhh! I'm so thirsty Would you please Open a beer for me? Then I keel over It's my first hangover.

mindsigns 29-Mar-06/1:11 AM
Nick at night-ish, I agree, so how else would you want to write a poem about long urinal excretion, gin hangovers and diarrhea...in the style of James Joyce maybe??? Or maybe Nietzsche??
I think a 7th grade style fits perfectly with these "fart joke" type of lyrics. So i guess I'm taking your comments as a complimient, Thanks!




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