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what i see with strings (Free verse) by New Life Drug
ive seen every thing she could possibly got to offer to you i'm not sure you could ever get quite all that you wanted im not sure sure sure i'll never know know know ive got memories of you locked inside my heart and my head and they're not getting out and i feel the tear down my cheek as it rolls it gets cold as air hits it i feel the blood on my leg i imagine im imagining it all and i know you're only a mile away but silence makes the distance so longer lack of conversation makes seeing you feel stronger and my eyes follow to wherever the light leads staring up at this celing with fresh paint reminds me of the moon which in turn reminds me of you and all i can do is hope that i'm not blind the lights should be out but why shouldnt i be able to see this dull lovely nothing that comes through me it settles here in all that i don't understand and the sounds keep coming out this could be the saddest song ive ever sung now my ears are rung dry with echos

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6738
Posted: March 13, 2004 7:56 PM PST; Last modified: March 13, 2004 7:56 PM PST
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[5] mindsigns @ 64.12.116.207 | 14-Mar-04/9:01 AM | Reply
It feels more like a run-on sentence than a poem, the images are too random=..some connect and some I just don't know...
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