Re: Never Alone at Night by Limness	4-Dec-02/3:03 AM
Dear Limness, Thank you for your reply to my comments. Thank you also for introducing "quietus" to me. I would still contend it is the wrong choice of word because while the end of relationship was a quietus for him, it was not for you in any sense of the word (there appear to be two). Hell, you are in agony for the love of him. Quietus is what you need, not what you have. Secondly my other difficulty is that the word is too obscure, save for the most erudite of readers. In a poem which is so touching and well written do you really want your readers to be scrambling for the dictionary? It breaks the spell. As to the audience you address, I find it is better to stick to one audience at a time, though having said that I am guilty myself (quite unnecessarily) in my submission Tribute to A Friend, which is written in the manner of Hilaire belloc. I am a new member of this poet's circle and I have only just submitted three poems yesterday. My others are Hattie and Party Mugging (AAgain). Please be so kind as to have a peek. Best wishes. NB You are very good.
Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	3-Dec-02/1:58 PM
So well crafted
Re: Cancer Haikus by poetandknowit	3-Dec-02/1:56 PM
Wonderful stuff (again)
Re: Kindling by <~>	3-Dec-02/1:52 PM
A beautiful touch. I really like it.
Re: Living Conditions by Christof	3-Dec-02/1:49 PM
Demonstrates a sure touch with language but I am just not sure it has worked as well as your other effort on which I have commented.
Re: Ouch by heroditus	3-Dec-02/1:47 PM
Tes, it is funny. But I am not sure about whether it works with the analogy of "Aim for the sky." Something like "Frolic with the beasts" may work better.
Re: On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit	3-Dec-02/1:43 PM
Come on. You can do better than this. You have got us going and then suddenly it's finished. You express yourself so well and we want more. And in this poem less is definiotely not more..
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	3-Dec-02/1:38 PM
Great stuff. I really enjoyed it.
Re: One Country by poetandknowit	3-Dec-02/1:35 PM
Some lovely images and a sure touch
Re: love song by <~>	3-Dec-02/1:30 PM
A fine ertoric tribute to some great rumpy pumpy (as we sometimes call it in the UK)
Re: On the Swings by Christof	3-Dec-02/1:26 PM
Very funny. A nice (old fashioned meaning) touch. Stylish. Elegant
Re: Work by poetandknowit	3-Dec-02/1:22 PM
Deeply evoking. Great.
Re: Bowed by <~>	3-Dec-02/1:17 PM
Some lovely construction and rhythym.
Re: Never Alone at Night by Limness	3-Dec-02/1:13 PM
This poem transmits a powerful sense of heartache. but in one or two places I was thrown. What do you mean by "before the quietus of us"? Also it is not altogether clear whom you are addressing always. In the second verse I thought it was me, the reader, then later it is plain you address your loved one. But I found myself very moved. Well done.