Re: Lady Bradbury’s Excursion by Dovina	1-Jul-04/2:19 PM
Very clever and humorous. Original for sure. A nine in my opinion.
Re: Center Of The Universe by Dovina	1-Jul-04/1:54 PM
How true is your observation. We tend to view the world from a very narrow and self-centered position. All things are inter-related and connected but this fact is largely unconsidered. Even an insect should be left alone if it is not bothersome. Well done.
Re: a comment on Recycled Stardust by Quarton	1-Jul-04/1:45 PM
Good advice. Thanks for the comments.
Re: The Poem Without an End Working Towards the Beginning by TheVoiceless	29-Jun-04/11:30 AM
This is mostly incoherent and rambles too much. Did you write it as a stream consciousness? (James Joyce wrote Ulysses with this technique) Perhaps you might take this and shorten for I believe it has some good ideas and concepts. I like the concept of no end in searching for the beginning. An example for the last line: "The end becomes infinite in my quest for the beginning" I do like the line: "Something to lay my mind to rest, giving it reason to ease." Quite lovely and consider deleting the obscenities. They, IMO, detract from the poem and its potential.
Re: Occam's Razor by Quarton	10-Jun-04/5:27 PM
I originally wrote this as a joke and admit it probably should have been left unposted. I'll do better next time(:
Re: a comment on Las Gaviotas by Bachus	16-Mar-04/10:26 AM
A vilanelle is difficult at best and near impossible to write without sounding forced due to the very strict rules required. I have tried this form and have had no positive results. You seem to have pulled it off quite well. In both form and content, a solid ten.
Re: Modern Man by ShaNoN+960317485	20-Dec-03/10:26 AM
A lot to contemplate in this piece. Quite exceptional in content and style. Kind of a Brave New World feel to this and what a neat way of expressing the new by means of the old. Being a quantum mehanic's junkie, I could relate to the fourth stanza in particular but hell, I can relate to all you express in this fascinating tale that would warm the heart of any Existentialist worth his/her salt. Camus would be proud tho I may be misinterpreting part of your meaning. Regardless, a ten!
Re: mothers by biggy	20-Dec-03/9:59 AM
Different but I liked it. Quite rhythmic and a sincere tribute. Not sure about the exlusion of capital letters butI have written some the same.
Re: a comment on Tomorrow by Quarton	30-Jun-03/7:53 PM
Thank you, Mr. Pig. I have written nothing new for a long time but hope to start writing again. Not sure why but I have had no desire, apathetic being my mind-set lately. I appreciate the suggestions by everyone and will delete the question mark and the (...)
Re: -=Dark_Angel=- -=In_Decline=- by wEdible Underpantsw	24-Jun-03/12:34 PM
OUCH!!!
Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined	25-Feb-03/9:16 AM
I liked this and the rhyme is well done except for the last two stanzas. Not sure I like mem'ry and temp'ry and you need to ask yourself if you would have written thus if there was no need to rhyme. Also, last stanza..."in that which is" seems awkward as fillers to balance the rhythm and pace. The second stanza is my favorite.
Re: The North Wind by Ranger	2-Feb-03/8:02 AM
This is good but could be better by tightening and deleting words that add no value to the poem. And the rhyme sounds a bit forced in spots. Still, a nice lyric.
Re: a comment on Elegy by Quarton	31-Jan-03/7:13 AM
Actually, I'm not sure either. As I just reread, it is borderline mawkish but it was written on a bad day. OOPS...Icarus it is.
Re: Small Town Tavern by NinjaPoet	30-Jan-03/6:40 PM
Right on! And don't forget "the attached disclosure."
Re: Small Town Tavern by NinjaPoet	30-Jan-03/5:31 PM
Sounds like a dangerous dude. Those mushrooms jusr don't mix with boose. He shoulda read the warning label. A solid 8.
Re: a comment on The Other Side of Me by Quarton	24-Jan-03/9:08 AM
Well, I'm not sure can. Perhaps I stressed the "mans" verbosity too much but I did wish to convey strongly his opinionated side which is not really how he feels and thinks inside. A tempter whose words are strewn about profusely and give the apearance of deep felt meaning and conviction where there is none... .In saying "without debate", I meant beyond rebuttal or reproach and the irony of his words being untrue to his other self while being perceived as sincere and genuine by those he "charms" with "honey-coated words." ....Hope this helps and I too suspect a melding as one grows older and more introspective. Thanks for your comments and I may make some minor changes tho not sure.
Re: mornings, january by <~>	24-Jan-03/8:34 AM
Seems kind of mundane for a haiku but perhaps I am missing something. Still, not bad and better than a four. Hell, thinking about it, everything is mundane to a greater or lesser degree.
Re: No more tears, or trail by Bachus	24-Jan-03/8:14 AM
Yes, Manifest Destiny. Its all ours because we say so. Slaughter the Indians and fight the Spanish and it's all OK because we say so. And I fear Bush has the same thoughts, just the country has changed. A solid 9 for causing me to think. It's all OK because we say so.
Re: a comment on The Other Side of Me by Quarton	24-Jan-03/7:44 AM
Yes, The Catcher in the Rye has long been a favorite of mine. Seems hard to believe it was written in 1951. Where has all the time gone?
Re: a comment on The Other Side of Me by Quarton	24-Jan-03/7:38 AM
Alright! I'll take the kiss and save the lollipop for later. Then again, maybe I should reverse that. I never could save the best for last.