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The Poem Without an End Working Towards the Beginning (Free verse) by TheVoiceless
This is the poem that realistically doesn’t end. Started writing it one line from the final, Just keep working towards the beginning, Yes that means it has no meaning, Just needed something to do to ease the feigning, Having no point makes it quit demeaning. Stupid as drinking to the point the room starts spinning. No awards do I expect to win, In fact something this stupid should be a sin. And this, people is line number ten. Please no one follow my direction making me a leader of men. What can I conclude with out an end? And a beginning that can never be reached, So much for proper English the teachers in school preached. That much be one thing I wasn’t awake for, I’m done for now because I can’t take anymore of this, I’d rather watch someone taking a piss, Cause this is a writing that I won’t miss writing when done, But there is no end, so it will never be done. That’s a horrid thought, I hope this line of shit you haven’t contemplated buying, Really now its time for me to say goodbye, Cause this is hell on my eyes, It’s a great reason to despise all my work, Perhaps the next idea will be better, If after this piece of masterful grade A crap I can still go on, Its already left a scare a mile long, Creating feels in my heart there in poetry I don’t belong. Wait just one minute. I won’t give up, I’ll come back next time swarmed up like a hive of bees, Reader to write about nature and the trees, Something to lay my mind to rest giving it reason to ease. Yes, now I’ll quit since you asked please. I’m sure a tease, Are you read to bed upon your knees for an end? There is no end because I’m trying to write my way to the beginning.

Up the ladder: Time
Down the ladder: This is for you

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7049
Posted: September 29, 2003 6:27 PM PDT; Last modified: September 29, 2003 6:27 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] TheVoiceless @ 216.248.118.201 | 30-Sep-03/12:36 PM | Reply
How might I ask did this piece of shit get a ten?
[n/a] DurtKL @ 65.173.32.8 | 30-Sep-03/1:58 PM | Reply
it's simple...look at the crap in the top 15...especially the #1
[6] Quarton @ 12.217.221.61 | 29-Jun-04/11:30 AM | Reply
This is mostly incoherent and rambles too much.
Did you write it as a stream consciousness?
(James Joyce wrote Ulysses with this technique)
Perhaps you might take this and shorten for I
believe it has some good ideas and concepts.
I like the concept of no end in searching for the
beginning. An example for the last line:

"The end becomes infinite in my quest for the
beginning"

I do like the line:

"Something to lay my mind to rest, giving it reason
to ease."
Quite lovely and consider deleting the obscenities.
They, IMO, detract from the poem and its potential.
[n/a] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 > Quarton | 29-Jun-04/10:00 PM | Reply
You're hugely wrong.
[n/a] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 > zodiac | 29-Jun-04/11:01 PM | Reply
Nay, my good sir, this is the epitome of great poetry. Each line should be savored and critiqued, metaphored in our own attempts to match its hugeness. Look again, pray, with eyes enlightened.
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