Quarton29 Jun 2004

This is mostly incoherent and rambles too much.
Did you write it as a stream consciousness?
(James Joyce wrote Ulysses with this technique)
Perhaps you might take this and shorten for I
believe it has some good ideas and concepts.
I like the concept of no end in searching for the
beginning. An example for the last line:

"The end becomes infinite in my quest for the
beginning"

I do like the line:

"Something to lay my mind to rest, giving it reason
to ease."
Quite lovely and consider deleting the obscenities.
They, IMO, detract from the poem and its potential.