| Re: a comment on the band by celticskatermatt1 |
8-Nov-05/12:09 AM |
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Above anything else what tells the reader that you are about 13 is the appalling spelling. This is nothing to do with the reader and I would have thought a simple spellcheck is within anyone's 'intellect'.
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| Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy |
8-Nov-05/12:05 AM |
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I find it interesting that when people use the written word to say bad things about black people they call it irony if they don't really mean it. I would have thought using socially unacceptable words and thoughts gives the writer a kick, a reactance against censorship. That is not really irony.
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| Re: a comment on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy |
8-Nov-05/12:01 AM |
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do you think black people intrinsically have a black self-image involving slavery and pimping. Now that is racist.
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| Re: a comment on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy |
7-Nov-05/11:58 PM |
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Oh, you are a rambling idiot. <:(
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| Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy |
7-Nov-05/2:44 PM |
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Oh, you are upset because I deleted a comment. I just thought you were a rambling idiot. :(
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| Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil |
2-Nov-05/2:09 AM |
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But when black people try to imitate whites (English) they do things like wear top hats and say things like 'Gosh it is eleven, we must surely be taking tea'. Don't you find that a bit insulting.
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| Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina |
31-Oct-05/10:24 AM |
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and what did god make your face for?
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| Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina |
31-Oct-05/8:27 AM |
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Are Jews a race then. How about Muslims. How about converts what the hell are they.
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| Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina |
31-Oct-05/8:08 AM |
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What do you think a race is.
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| Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina |
31-Oct-05/7:59 AM |
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I don't know any Missourians but I do know (of) Cockneys and can assure you they are a race. They are a discrete group based around commonly held customs such as playing the piano and being a bit thick.
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| Re: The Gospel According to Zodiac by Dovina |
31-Oct-05/3:52 AM |
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Not sure about the relevance of verse three. Otherwise cool.
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| Re: The nymph steals the farm-son by <~> |
11-Oct-05/7:44 AM |
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The lathe of fact indeed. :(
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| Re: A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina |
4-Oct-05/11:49 AM |
Nice build up.
The ending is a bit rushed.
Try and work the poem to its natural conclusion through image rather than 'explaining the plot'
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| Re: a comment on Why Iâm Homeless by Dovina |
4-Oct-05/11:39 AM |
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| Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil |
4-Oct-05/11:27 AM |
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The last two lines of the poem are ridiculous. 'Coerce/there disordered feelings to verse' 'to' should be at least be 'to because it is a contraction of into.
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| Re: A Night By The Shore by Bhaskaryya |
22-May-05/1:48 PM |
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boon, goon and croon are forced rhymes and if references are your thing (i.e. aashik's soul) use some more it makes the poem interesting. Other than that well done.
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| Re: Making a Mark by andrew barnes |
22-May-05/1:44 PM |
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Fair enough. I agree with W though. There is a missed opportunity to be creative in the early part.
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| Re: Ungrateful by Damien_ |
22-May-05/1:38 PM |
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| Re: Rock of the Earth by ingwa |
22-May-05/1:33 PM |
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Quite like the first verse although the 'ages gone by' and then 'hunts gone by' sounds inelegant and before I die seems a bit melodramatic. Sonically speaking the poem does not hang together well, the rhythm is all over the place.
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| Re: Finding Gin and Santa by richa |
8-May-05/12:44 PM |
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Dear Mr Nentwined. Can poemranker spell seance properly?
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