Re: At A Loss by NewbieMe	11-Nov-02/9:03 AM
Could be improved, okay as it is obviously from the heart
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Nov-02/9:13 AM
Our styles are similar. In depth about a shallow love, nice one dude
Re: Feelings Inside by confuzdlilgirl	11-Nov-02/9:27 AM
your verbal acoustic is well tuned, i give 7/10 because it flows with lament thicker than plasma, check mine out i'm a virgin writer on this site
Re: A Green Moons Haze by pink_punk_kisses87	12-Nov-02/2:35 AM
Cool Ode I too am numb
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Nov-02/3:17 AM
I have e mailed this to my mate psycho, and he hails you as his brother. This is a truly breathtakingly, heartachingly,tapestry of emotion I f**** loved it man, you carry on making those seagulls peck the eyes out of the crows in our surrendered hearts, pecking and pecking till they tear us apart. absolute f****g A ! you bought the sycophant out in me and thats rare for me coz i'm i'm a miserable shite.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Nov-02/3:50 AM
nice poem of social voyeurism, u seem to paint the scene 'chagall' style, that cigarette thing we men like to do that.....would appreciate your comments on mine i'm new on this site.
Re: IF Now! by feathers68	12-Nov-02/9:33 AM
this sounds like a scene from a film called the prophecy, its a nice poem, too prayerlike for me, it wouldnt be out of place in a salacious mood. I have a theory of Angels.....the sound of your heartbeat is really the flapping of angels wings and that your heart is broken it carries your soul unto heaven so you are reincarnated into a new host so you have another chance of finding truelove, they are our guardian angels, bastards of a God who condemned them for challenging fate, so when you see a feather fall, it is an angel falling from grace, and they rain their love down on you, you cant fell it soak you but it does, What do i know man i'm fucked up
Re: There is no end by INTRANSIT	13-Nov-02/3:47 AM
That Hits !
Re: Returning by INTRANSIT	13-Nov-02/3:53 AM
Felt I was at on the starboard with him, a polished ode, but help me out on the last line, why the torturer?
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/4:00 AM
Hi Gods wife we havent met, I liked your poem, and from what i see many like your comments, why not collect all your comments and whack it on as a poem?
Re: My Friend? by Blade	13-Nov-02/4:51 AM
lose the last line, it dont deserve to be voted this shite by others i give 5 coz i reckon you were possessed by Ouzo
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/5:29 AM
from a welsh guy; my version Princess Di Beautiful, fashionable Died in ugly fashion Lived with no passion, Dodi, do or die - she didnt
Re: epicentre by richa	13-Nov-02/5:39 AM
love the opening 4 stanzas best, your work is nice to read and i will look out for more of your work. I have noticed by reading poems on this site that theirs a lot of zerohappy raters on some pretty good stuff, if you get anything below 5 their talking shit, give this a 9, nice one richa, good luck
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/5:41 AM
you still got me reading your stuff, your use of language is beautiful.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/5:47 AM
still reading.......still intrigued, 10/10 for 20/20 vision i'm trying to find a crap one you've wrote, congratulations i cant so i'm giving up. Please read one of mine if you get time
Re: Goodbye Daddy by NewbieMe	13-Nov-02/6:09 AM
Hi newbieme, first of all I thought your poem was very moving, its a bit freaky as i too wrote a poem called 'Goodbye Dad' and when i post it next week i want you to read it because the scene you set is similar to mine. I imagine that could be read at a funeral and dont forget mate, poetry is not always about critical consensus most people would be moved by your poem and that makes it a force, you know this aint W.H Audens 'Funeral' but its your Auden and i respect that, if it was any Dad they would be proud.