Comments byCaducus, 1021–1040 back. Include replies

on At A Loss by NewbieMe 11 Nov 2002, 9:03 AM
Could be improved, okay as it is obviously from the heart
on some deleted poem 11 Nov 2002, 9:13 AM
Our styles are similar.

In depth about a shallow love, nice one dude
on Feelings Inside by confuzdlilgirl 11 Nov 2002, 9:27 AM
your verbal acoustic is well tuned, i give 7/10 because it flows with lament thicker than plasma, check mine out i'm a virgin writer on this site
on A Green Moons Haze by pink_punk_kisses87 12 Nov 2002, 2:35 AM
Cool Ode

I too am numb
on some deleted poem 12 Nov 2002, 3:17 AM
I have e mailed this to my mate psycho, and he hails you as his brother.

This is a truly breathtakingly, heartachingly,tapestry of emotion I f**** loved it man, you carry on making those seagulls peck the eyes out of the crows in our surrendered hearts, pecking and pecking till they tear us apart.

absolute f****g A !

you bought the sycophant out in me and thats rare for me coz i'm i'm a miserable shite.
on some deleted poem 12 Nov 2002, 3:50 AM
nice poem of social voyeurism, u seem to paint the scene 'chagall' style, that cigarette thing we men like to do that.....would appreciate your comments on mine i'm new on this site.
on IF Now! by feathers68 12 Nov 2002, 9:33 AM
this sounds like a scene from a film called the prophecy, its a nice poem, too prayerlike for me, it wouldnt be out of place in a salacious mood. I have a theory of Angels.....the sound of your heartbeat is really the flapping of angels wings and that your heart is broken it carries your soul unto heaven so you are reincarnated into a new host so you have another chance of finding truelove, they are our guardian angels, bastards of a God who condemned them for challenging fate, so when you see a feather fall, it is an angel falling from grace, and they rain their love down on you, you cant fell it soak you but it does, What do i know man i'm fucked up
on There is no end by INTRANSIT 13 Nov 2002, 3:47 AM
That Hits !
on Returning by INTRANSIT 13 Nov 2002, 3:53 AM
Felt I was at on the starboard with him, a polished ode, but help me out on the last line, why the torturer?
on some deleted poem 13 Nov 2002, 4:00 AM
Hi Gods wife we havent met, I liked your poem, and from what i see many like your comments, why not collect all your comments and whack it on as a poem?
on My Friend? by Blade 13 Nov 2002, 4:51 AM
lose the last line, it dont deserve to be voted this shite by others i give 5 coz i reckon you were possessed by Ouzo
on some deleted poem 13 Nov 2002, 5:29 AM
from a welsh guy; my version

Princess Di Beautiful, fashionable
Died in ugly fashion
Lived with no passion,
Dodi, do or die - she didnt
on epicentre by richa 13 Nov 2002, 5:39 AM
love the opening 4 stanzas best, your work is nice to read and i will look out for more of your work. I have noticed by reading poems on this site that theirs a lot of zerohappy raters on some pretty good stuff, if you get anything below 5 their talking shit, give this a 9, nice one richa, good luck
on some deleted poem 13 Nov 2002, 5:41 AM
you still got me reading your stuff, your use of language is beautiful.
on some deleted poem 13 Nov 2002, 5:47 AM
still reading.......still intrigued, 10/10 for 20/20 vision

i'm trying to find a crap one you've wrote, congratulations i cant so i'm giving up.

Please read one of mine if you get time
on Goodbye Daddy by NewbieMe 13 Nov 2002, 6:09 AM
Hi newbieme, first of all I thought your poem was very moving, its a bit freaky as i too wrote a poem called 'Goodbye Dad' and when i post it next week i want you to read it because the scene you set is similar to mine. I imagine that could be read at a funeral and dont forget mate, poetry is not always about critical consensus most people would be moved by your poem and that makes it a force, you know this aint W.H Audens 'Funeral' but its your Auden and i respect that, if it was any Dad they would be proud.