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Feelings Inside (Ode) by confuzdlilgirl
I'm scared to get involved To see if it could be I'm scared that I'll get attached And broken be the fee I'm sorry but I cant take that risk I just wont go back that way I wont venture in the past And feel that miserable way I hope you're not attached I am sorry if you ask me to stay because if so my answer will be We must part our separate way It's just impossible, My lesson I've come to find to keep my heart with me So then it's always mine Don't ask me to give you Something that is mine I already know the truth In the end I won't be fine I've been hurt too much Don't want to anymore I've gone through all the pain I've hardened to the core I'm not asking you to see I'm not asking to understand It's just I cannot go back So please don't take my hand I'm sorry but right now I have to say please wait Because I'm still broken inside A lock's still on the gate You may never understand Why I'm this way within I don't know how it start And I cannot see the end.

Up the ladder: i dunno
Down the ladder: Gone

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.875
Weighted score: 4.9663825
Overall Rank: 8503
Posted: November 10, 2002 9:48 AM PST; Last modified: November 10, 2002 9:48 AM PST
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Comments:
[7] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 11-Nov-02/9:27 AM | Reply
your verbal acoustic is well tuned, i give 7/10 because it flows with lament thicker than plasma, check mine out i'm a virgin writer on this site
[6] Nicholas Monson @ 195.92.67.69 | 4-Dec-02/4:47 AM | Reply
Doesn't have the quality of some of your other poems. Metre is erratic. The rhymes could be improved. This is a draft to work on. Come on. You can do it.
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