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At A Loss (Free verse) by NewbieMe
Too often I find myself at a loss for words Struggling for something to say To tell you all the emotions my heart is feeling for you Too often I find myself staring at you Gazing at your wholeness Admiring every detail of your body Too often I find myself thinking Of ways to make you happy Of how to enjoy every moment with you Too often I find myself imagining What our life would be like What the future holds for us Too often I find myself hoping That this will never end Praying that we could last forever Too often I find myself crying Because it never did last forever Because you left me for someone better

Up the ladder: A mans obligation
Down the ladder: Metaphysical Haiku

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.714286
Weighted score: 5.192101
Overall Rank: 4626
Posted: November 11, 2002 8:40 AM PST; Last modified: November 11, 2002 8:40 AM PST
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Comments:
[4] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 11-Nov-02/9:03 AM | Reply
Could be improved, okay as it is obviously from the heart
[8] Britpop @ 195.171.139.150 | 11-Nov-02/9:06 AM | Reply
I think this is really good and I feel that it has been really thought out. The reader gets quite a degree of sympathy towards the end I think.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 22-Feb-03/9:30 AM | Reply
Been there it sux.
LIFE GETS BETTER AWARDE -10-
[n/a] NewbieMe @ 202.70.101.3 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 22-Feb-03/10:10 AM | Reply
i'm soooooooo touched u took the time to read my poems, i didn't expect u to read them all at the same time tho, thanks.

btw, i'm no he, am a she ;)
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 > NewbieMe | 22-Feb-03/2:54 PM | Reply
You asked and I was bored so no prob.
Oh yeah sorry I didn't think that I left any gender bias responses but I apologize if I did and just so you know I'm a he.
Have a nice day :)
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