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A Green Moons Haze (Free verse) by pink_punk_kisses87
Lying under a green moons haze,
the view from my window seems insignificant.
The lightning bugs play tag around the gorged budding tree.
My thoughts drift away with the sympathetic summer wind.
I am numb.
The worries of the world seem meaningless at this point.
I try to picture a faultless sunrise.
The haze has gotten closer to my heart.
My dreams run out my mouth then fall and hit the floor.
Shattered into a thousand pieces my life seems to be a jigsaw puzzel.
I am numb.
The feeling of life has filled threw my fingertips and leaked out the
sides.
I have fallen to the cold floor trying to regain countenance.
I am numb.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8
Weighted score: 5.4
Overall Rank: 3179
Posted: November 11, 2002 3:55 PM PST; Last modified: November 11, 2002 3:55 PM PST
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but jigsaw aren't jagged (shattered, whatever) even though they are confusing and in a thousand pieces. dammit man! (woman)! you are a tease. shape this up. the bit about the haze seeping closer to your heart is eerily brilliant, damn you. i demand a rewrite.