on some deleted poem
2 Sep 2003, 9:14 PM
An intimate view...
on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2003, 9:45 PM
I didn't care much for the monologue/epilogue rhyming. Of all the poetry I ve read from you this one seems to be forced. Maybe it's just me?
on Curiously here by philthegreek
3 Sep 2003, 4:19 PM
Personally I enjoyed the part about the fresh young girl,other than that, well...
on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2003, 9:35 PM
Break away. . . Those chains that bind,
They're only strong in your mind.
Fulfill your fantasy, break away
Someone better is sure to come your way.
They're only strong in your mind.
Fulfill your fantasy, break away
Someone better is sure to come your way.
on The One and Only by J.B. Manning
3 Sep 2003, 4:21 PM
Sounds like Eminem on an off day.
on R.O.X. by InvertedEar
3 Sep 2003, 7:23 AM
I don't know about erotic, but it's a great song. She always makes good music eh?
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2003, 8:20 PM
Hey Electro, I Started writing this poem today at work because I didn't have the energy to actually work. Your lucky the boss showed up, or this would be mine.
I think even those of us who suppose ourselves to be good moral people still have much to grow before we are prepared for the "second" coming of Christ.
Second is parenthesised for Dave. His time in no way ended in the year 33, or 0 whenever they began the Roman calendar.
I think even those of us who suppose ourselves to be good moral people still have much to grow before we are prepared for the "second" coming of Christ.
Second is parenthesised for Dave. His time in no way ended in the year 33, or 0 whenever they began the Roman calendar.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2003, 8:23 PM
Bared, His deeds will be bared. Invest in a spellchecker Electro.
Feel free to delete this one.
Feel free to delete this one.
on #2 Entry from Chico, a stalker on Pico, Jason Bigg's lobster by <{Baba^Yaga}>
3 Sep 2003, 7:26 AM
Chico has issues big ones
on Pray For Cum By JesusFreak (parody of CLS's pray for help) by DreamerSupreme
3 Sep 2003, 4:25 PM
You are most assuredly a sick fuck,Rot in hell with your jizz crusted crap.
on Bury Me at Dead Man's Point by EAger to Offend
3 Sep 2003, 7:38 AM
A vivid picture of a place I'm sure I've been, I just can't remember when.
on The Waiting Room by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
3 Sep 2003, 7:19 AM
Not too shabby, I especially like the third stanza, the scooter...
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2003, 7:30 AM
And in my heart you will stay?
I think you need a bit more originality
But I like the part about avoiding the curve.
I shall bestow a six for now, but I should hold for the rewrite Electro
I think you need a bit more originality
But I like the part about avoiding the curve.
I shall bestow a six for now, but I should hold for the rewrite Electro
on some deleted poem
2 Sep 2003, 9:17 PM
I was going to tell you that Bachus is going to tear this up, but I see I am too late.
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 8:15 PM
You lost me at the end there, and it's (pane) when referring to a window. All in all I think you're going to be a fine poet. Welcome to 'Poem Wanker'
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 8:17 PM
Well done Electro, Makes me miss mine as well
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 8:22 PM
Well done. Let's hear more
on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2003, 9:25 PM
Life is not so bad, with or without a map. And it may be hard but when they move on we must do the same.
on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2003, 9:28 PM
I want to be there the next time you get together. I always liked redheads myself. Is she as cute as you?