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31-Aug-03/9:25 PM |
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Life is not so bad, with or without a map. And it may be hard but when they move on we must do the same.
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31-Aug-03/9:28 PM |
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I want to be there the next time you get together. I always liked redheads myself. Is she as cute as you?
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31-Aug-03/9:35 PM |
Break away. . . Those chains that bind,
They're only strong in your mind.
Fulfill your fantasy, break away
Someone better is sure to come your way.
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31-Aug-03/9:45 PM |
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I didn't care much for the monologue/epilogue rhyming. Of all the poetry I ve read from you this one seems to be forced. Maybe it's just me?
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1-Sep-03/8:15 PM |
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You lost me at the end there, and it's (pane) when referring to a window. All in all I think you're going to be a fine poet. Welcome to 'Poem Wanker'
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1-Sep-03/8:17 PM |
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Well done Electro, Makes me miss mine as well
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1-Sep-03/8:22 PM |
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Well done. Let's hear more
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2-Sep-03/9:14 PM |
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2-Sep-03/9:17 PM |
I was going to tell you that Bachus is going to tear this up, but I see I am too late.
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| Re: The Waiting Room by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
3-Sep-03/7:19 AM |
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Not too shabby, I especially like the third stanza, the scooter...
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| Re: R.O.X. by InvertedEar |
3-Sep-03/7:23 AM |
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I don't know about erotic, but it's a great song. She always makes good music eh?
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| Re: #2 Entry from Chico, a stalker on Pico, Jason Bigg's lobster by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
3-Sep-03/7:26 AM |
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Chico has issues big ones
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3-Sep-03/7:30 AM |
And in my heart you will stay?
I think you need a bit more originality
But I like the part about avoiding the curve.
I shall bestow a six for now, but I should hold for the rewrite Electro
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| Re: Bury Me at Dead Man's Point by EAger to Offend |
3-Sep-03/7:38 AM |
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A vivid picture of a place I'm sure I've been, I just can't remember when.
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| Re: none by tadpole |
3-Sep-03/11:56 AM |
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Good rhythm. i really like this. Let's see some more 1
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| Re: Curiously here by philthegreek |
3-Sep-03/4:19 PM |
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Personally I enjoyed the part about the fresh young girl,other than that, well...
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| Re: The One and Only by J.B. Manning |
3-Sep-03/4:21 PM |
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Sounds like Eminem on an off day.
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| Re: Pray For Cum By JesusFreak (parody of CLS's pray for help) by DreamerSupreme |
3-Sep-03/4:25 PM |
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You are most assuredly a sick fuck,Rot in hell with your jizz crusted crap.
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5-Sep-03/8:20 PM |
Hey Electro, I Started writing this poem today at work because I didn't have the energy to actually work. Your lucky the boss showed up, or this would be mine.
I think even those of us who suppose ourselves to be good moral people still have much to grow before we are prepared for the "second" coming of Christ.
Second is parenthesised for Dave. His time in no way ended in the year 33, or 0 whenever they began the Roman calendar.
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5-Sep-03/8:23 PM |
Bared, His deeds will be bared. Invest in a spellchecker Electro.
Feel free to delete this one.
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