Comments byINTRANSIT, 1181–1200 back. Include replies

on some deleted poem 21 Apr 2003, 6:43 PM
nutty, but on point
on some deleted poem 21 Apr 2003, 6:45 PM
no. make a haiku for the utensil drawer.
on Noone really knows by CHRMEcountryGRL 21 Apr 2003, 9:23 PM
You need some concrete. To grind off that chrome.
on some deleted poem 22 Apr 2003, 6:28 AM
Whats babycham? Chambord? The changes are subtle but better. Still a fun story.
on The Trees by anitawit 22 Apr 2003, 6:32 AM
um, neeter, paki dinged me for opening with a question once. this shows me why. That is the only change. Very good. Less is more always works for me.
on The Days Are Dying by anitawit 22 Apr 2003, 6:35 AM
bingo.
on When the Future Comes to Pass by e1ementfire 22 Apr 2003, 6:44 AM
replEnished. A religious Eminem? Liked it anyway.
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof 22 Apr 2003, 4:12 PM
If this ever dissappears, I'll die.
on some deleted poem 22 Apr 2003, 7:03 PM
The easterly wind carries much weight. When it gets where it is going it may carry hate. Tread lightly on foreign land.

Say, I tweaked (my wife) care to peek?
She likes it when I tweak her.
on suck fucker punch by wordho 23 Apr 2003, 5:49 AM
the short uncapped sentences really bring out the anger/frustration. interesting tool you have there. or lack thereof.
on isms and ities by Amelia 23 Apr 2003, 2:10 PM
Don't ever stop reaching.....
on spring by <~> 23 Apr 2003, 2:14 PM
well.... so much for beer bottles.
on some deleted poem 24 Apr 2003, 5:57 AM
I must be missing something. S-3 and the last sum it up for me. It's good. It's you. I just think you are capable of more.;)
on some deleted poem 24 Apr 2003, 6:00 AM
drop the (s) from insomniac. Seems pretty beefy otherwise.
on some deleted poem 24 Apr 2003, 6:06 AM
Drats! I love the beat. The seeming repetetive nature of the words kills me. Trim and blend, I would recommend.
on Jenny Jones, Jenny Jones by bondjedi 24 Apr 2003, 6:10 AM
Do all of these shows. together.
on Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger 24 Apr 2003, 5:14 PM
Nice to know you've got a coach. The woodsman part seemed humorous, to me. And the knigdom manager made it seem like you gave up. Just my view. I'm rather blind at the moment.
on some deleted poem 24 Apr 2003, 5:45 PM
Ignore me. I'm polluted and need to clear my head.
on I Speak of Expanses by anitawit 25 Apr 2003, 6:44 AM
Lines 2 and 7 seem a wee off beat. but it's quite enjoyable.
on Landscapes In The Sky by anitawit 25 Apr 2003, 6:49 AM
I think myriad(s). I think when you wrote this, you sat down and wrote without thinking, just wrote. and it works. 8 I think the other is better because you put work into it. both are swell.