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isms and ities (Free verse) by Amelia Moments of integrity
border on sexuality
to be or is it not to be?
Who in here knows, rightly, what's he?
Mediocre are my days of old
i can not claim to be so bold
as to know what is foretold
left for my eyes to behold
"ism to ism for ism..."
said Wole his words a square prism
voice of black nepotism
etched all in concave-ism
Read "Kongi's Harvest", then tell me
If the poetry flows not free
"I say solemnly unto thee..."
forever words, eternal be.
Up the ladder:
??? Ever ???
Down the ladder:
underwater
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Posted: April 7, 2003 3:27 PM PDT; Last modified: April 23, 2003 7:42 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10109 Comments:
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~incarnate~ @ 198.146.137.166
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7-Apr-03/4:23 PM
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Hey guys, she's having a major problem with line 4, do have any ideas for it? Suggestions are welcome, just don't insult the writer. Please and thankyou.
Awefully pretentious claim in your fourth stanza other than not bad -7-
Have you read Kongi's Harvest? If you have, do you leave in West Africa? If you do then, do you understand the way our poetry moves or more plainly, how we were taught poetry? If all the answers are no to all the questions, then why do you think the "claim" is "Awefully pretentious?"
Umm... No No and Since the other two were no No. All though I am fully aware how our poetry moves and we are moved by it(plus I figure there are a million different ways to learn poetry so No I won't claim to know them all or how they are taught). I was saying that Claiming that By reading Kongi's Harvest my Poetry will flow more free is awefully pretentious, No offense to you or the afore mentioned title but its kinda ironic that you talk about words flowing freely but you confined yourself to ryhme. Not to mention the fact that how are you supposed to know the extent of how my poetry flows? I mean it could run rampant and wild for all you know. Mostly I'm just giving you a hard time so relax and calm down a bit. I was also being Pretentious by having not read the book(more Irony) and refuting your claim.
:) I did like this and I ask That you except my most humble and honest apology for making a light over something you seem to care about very passionatly.
Apology accepted, that was very genteel of you. In a reciprocal manner i will tweak it to suit my audience (no haugtiness intended). See what you think.
why would you consider it a confine
to cause one's words to ryhme? do you think it not a rythmic design for as such these sounds to intertwine?
I meant live, not leave. One more question, what do you think my claim is?
YOU FORGOT JISM
...and titties
Don't ever stop reaching.....
Thanks babe, i won't. :)
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