| Re: Crowned unkind by Alyssa91 |
22-May-03/7:05 AM |
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I think the world would be a better place if people were kind instead of unkind. What do you think?
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| Re: Ending 1997 in the Southern Hemisphere by daniella |
22-May-03/4:43 AM |
Ending 1897 in the Southern Bumisphere (Free verse) by -=Dark_Angel=-
It came and went away,
but I'll always remember that time I broke wind
musical gays plunder the bum
inspired by its brownful tunes.
In the violent aftermath of forgotten dreams,
now lost in the dark stench of human frailty and massively fermented scotch egglingtons,
once again I find solitude
as peasants flee vomitting,
smothering their gnarled faces with napkins
folded in upon themselves.
There's a promise gave,
which is given to the quiet self,
to replace my underpants as soon as possible.
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| Re: a comment on Im innocent by Horus9 |
22-May-03/4:23 AM |
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Buenos muches! Hablos in esprante tu burro del pantalones?
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| Re: a comment on The Order Of Things by Mr Pig |
21-May-03/2:06 PM |
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I think there are a lot of important messages we miss in our daily lives. In these troubled times of war and uncertainty, we are so often concerned with living from day to day that we forget to stop and discover the simple facts of love, hope and faith that are right under our noses. What do you think?
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| Re: The Order Of Things by Mr Pig |
21-May-03/2:04 PM |
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Please write more about the decrepit farmer and his jaded harvest. What sort of hat was he wearing? Was his face rotting away underneath it? Feel. Explore.
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| Re: Torvald, the Dwarven Toast-Smith by razorgrin |
21-May-03/5:51 AM |
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| Re: deleted scenes by Bill Z Bub |
21-May-03/5:38 AM |
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| Re: All A Mistake by Alyssa91 |
21-May-03/5:36 AM |
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Beautiful! Simply beautiful! Normally I would have said this poeme was crap, but the sheer depth of emotion completely obviates all the other criteria!! 11/10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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| Re: Milkshake until beef jerky by horus8 |
21-May-03/5:32 AM |
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Every line of this follows a different scanning pattern. Also you used the wrong "then" and you have incorrectly punctuated the entire piece. Great work!! -=10=-
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| Re: a comment on Bitter Breakfast by nugit15 |
21-May-03/1:01 AM |
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| Re: Bitter Breakfast by nugit15 |
20-May-03/3:36 PM |
Bitter Beakfast (Free verse) by D.H.Lawrence
hornless squid-beak
now putrid
after I left
after you left
after we left
it stuffed behind the sofa on a hot, hot day
and I in pyjamas for the heat.
and the flies settled on it
and cleared away the evidence of what we had (done)
but not before there were words
and back rubs
taking place on top of it
like some sort of revolting omelette topping
matted with gravy
and weighted egglingtons.
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| Re: Dear Lord by simone_girard |
20-May-03/5:55 AM |
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Every line contains something which is utterly wrong.
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| Re: dancing to be flowers by richa |
19-May-03/6:10 PM |
well it started badly, tailed off a little in middle, and the less said about the end the better. Apart from that, I loved it!
ace / 10
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| Re: a comment on Darkness by Felzpoet |
19-May-03/6:05 PM |
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yeah i guess you're right how can i possibly win against someone whose only comeback is to keep mentioning how important it is to 'get laid'.
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| Re: a comment on Endure by Felzpoet |
19-May-03/5:51 PM |
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What should I do with my opinion?
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| Re: Why Are We Here? by beakism |
19-May-03/5:45 PM |
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Do you always talk to your mother like that? Honestly beakism, I thought you were a very mature young man, but after hearing this recent outburst of yours I'm not sure what to think. I knew something was wrong when I discovered those brown footprints leading up to your bedroom door, but my faith deserted me completely when you shoved the sun up your arse and farted on Christ's balls.
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| Re: a comment on If this isn't plagiarism I don't know what is... by Yardbird |
19-May-03/5:27 PM |
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is it? And there I was thinking I'd struck a bum-splatteringly telling blow with the maturity of that insult. But now it seems to have horribly backfired! Oh how ghastly... you may have won this round, Yardbird... but guess what: your face is made of rice and your eyes smell of bum-cacks.
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| Re: a comment on If this isn't plagiarism I don't know what is... by Yardbird |
19-May-03/12:47 PM |
You forgot 'horus g8'.
L.O.L.
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| Re: a comment on Recipe for Regaining Youth by Blade |
19-May-03/9:19 AM |
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Haven't you noticed that no poeme on this site ever has an average of x when all of its votes are equal to x (unless x is 5)?
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| Re: Darkness by Felzpoet |
19-May-03/8:00 AM |
Diarrhoea (Sonnet) by Felchpoet
Diarrhoea has set on another day
Diarrhoea has arrived, leaving no thong (unsoiled)
Diarrhoea so wet, it comes out as spray
Diarrhoea so brown, staining everything
The brown hole has blown my guts out
The brown hole drips on my tights
The brown hole leaks from within
The brown hole, I can't stop the shite
The void in my bum has widened
The void adds to my ablution
The void has continuously brownened
The diarrhoea has taken me over
Spraying the weight of the world from my bum.
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