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Sonnet № 49380

Darkness

by Felzpoet

Member since 2003 · Posted 18 May 2003 · 6 comments

Darkness has set on another day Darkness has arrived, leaving nothing Darkness so dark, nothing can play Darkness so cold, killing everything The black hole has sucked me in The black hole grips on tight The black hole keeps me within The black hole, I can’t see the light The void in my heart has widened The void adds to my seclusion The void has continuously deepened The darkness has taken me over Lifting the weight of the world from my shoulder

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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-May-03/8:00 AM Reply
Diarrhoea (Sonnet) by Felchpoet

Diarrhoea has set on another day
Diarrhoea has arrived, leaving no thong (unsoiled)
Diarrhoea so wet, it comes out as spray
Diarrhoea so brown, staining everything
The brown hole has blown my guts out
The brown hole drips on my tights
The brown hole leaks from within
The brown hole, I can't stop the shite
The void in my bum has widened
The void adds to my ablution
The void has continuously brownened
The diarrhoea has taken me over
Spraying the weight of the world from my bum.
[n/a] Felzpoet › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-May-03/5:46 PM Reply
Hey not bad but u forgot one of the voids
u know i seriously think u need to get laid
and id like to continue this battle of wits were having but ur servearly unequiped so remove the perpetual stick from ur ass and shut tha hell up
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Felzpoet 19-May-03/6:05 PM Reply
yeah i guess you're right how can i possibly win against someone whose only comeback is to keep mentioning how important it is to 'get laid'.
[n/a] Felzpoet › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-May-03/7:12 PM Reply
you couldnt count high enough to reach my IQ then again you cant count to many ppls IQ on your fingers except mabey yours
and btw i dont consider it tht important but u seem so edgy u need to other wise nothin will remove that stick from ur ass
[7] horus8 15-Aug-03/12:53 AM Reply
Vagina 7.
[4] andrewjthomas 27-Jan-04/3:59 PM Reply
not quite a sonnet - must be 14 lines
also, needs iambic pentameter
the repetition is forced and elementary
however, you do make a nice turn at the end