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Darkness (Sonnet) by Felzpoet Darkness has set on another day
Darkness has arrived, leaving nothing
Darkness so dark, nothing can play
Darkness so cold, killing everything
The black hole has sucked me in
The black hole grips on tight
The black hole keeps me within
The black hole, I canât see the light
The void in my heart has widened
The void adds to my seclusion
The void has continuously deepened
The darkness has taken me over
Lifting the weight of the world from my shoulder
Up the ladder:
Payday
Down the ladder:
~~~ My Lament For Museheart ~~~
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Posted: May 18, 2003 5:50 PM PDT; Last modified: May 18, 2003 5:50 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.85 Overall Rank: 10590 Comments:
Vagina 7.
not quite a sonnet - must be 14 lines
also, needs iambic pentameter the repetition is forced and elementary however, you do make a nice turn at the end 202 view(s)
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Diarrhoea has set on another day
Diarrhoea has arrived, leaving no thong (unsoiled)
Diarrhoea so wet, it comes out as spray
Diarrhoea so brown, staining everything
The brown hole has blown my guts out
The brown hole drips on my tights
The brown hole leaks from within
The brown hole, I can't stop the shite
The void in my bum has widened
The void adds to my ablution
The void has continuously brownened
The diarrhoea has taken me over
Spraying the weight of the world from my bum.
u know i seriously think u need to get laid
and id like to continue this battle of wits were having but ur servearly unequiped so remove the perpetual stick from ur ass and shut tha hell up
and btw i dont consider it tht important but u seem so edgy u need to other wise nothin will remove that stick from ur ass