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Darkness (Sonnet) by Felzpoet

Darkness has set on another day Darkness has arrived, leaving nothing Darkness so dark, nothing can play Darkness so cold, killing everything The black hole has sucked me in The black hole grips on tight The black hole keeps me within The black hole, I can’t see the light The void in my heart has widened The void adds to my seclusion The void has continuously deepened The darkness has taken me over Lifting the weight of the world from my shoulder

andrewjthomas 27-Jan-04/3:59 PM
not quite a sonnet - must be 14 lines
also, needs iambic pentameter
the repetition is forced and elementary
however, you do make a nice turn at the end




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