Re: love song by <~>	15-Aug-02/6:20 PM
I just re-read my poeme and realised it could easily be interpreted as mocking you/your poeme. It wasn't meant that way. It was meant to be only self-referential. I thought this poeme was qvite good, and cello-shaped. O Jesu what have I done...
Re: Kiss Me by Butterflies	15-Aug-02/6:12 PM
Yes...clearly 'cohort' implies a group somewhere. But why does that mean that -=Dark_Angel=- couldn't be a cohort? Is -=Dark_Angel=- not part of a group? Does he not bleed? Where is your sense of compassion, man? Your sense of humility?! I swear to God, as soon as I get out of here I'm setting up a little shop, selling Shoe-hornes for all who require aid in dressing.
Re: love song by <~>	15-Aug-02/6:10 PM
I wasn't implying that you are a 'mature poet'. I was being ironic in suggesting that 'Dickensian' was mature, when, in fact, it clearly is not mature. And what's all this about 'breaking it up'? I've got the odd extra space here and there to make things fit, and there's a natural gap at the bottom where the testicles live, but surely that's all fine and dandy?
Re: Kiss Me by Butterflies	15-Aug-02/6:01 PM
Are you implying that -=Dark_Angel=- is a 'cohort', and moreover that he would criticise such a beautiful, sensual poeme such as this? On the contrary, Sir! This poeme is splendid indeede! I will give a line by line account of why I strongly believe that this is the finest love poeme ever written. Uh-um. Line 1: Bitter love and separation. The two crucial elements to a love poem with any dramatic and emotional tension. 2. Tentative release and the beginning of acceptance and healing. This is the next step, and allows the reader a small sandbar of hope after the crushing wave of sorrow in line 1. Line 3: The writer tries to rationalise the tersity of the breakup, even though he/she wishes it would go on for longer deep in his/her heart. Line 4: Further rationalisation, using a beautiful metaphor - string, heartstrings - I do believe this is my favourite love poem metaphor. A true classic. Line 5: Oh fuck it I can't be arsed. This is the most awful load of complete arse-cake I've ever read. You dunce, Songstar. This is terrible. It's so cliched Skeletor could shake his fist at it and curse and it wouldn't even blink. It's pointless, obvious, generic, meaningless, dull, badly written, frustrating, ill-thought-out, self-indulgent and, above all, it's exactly the sort of poeme that I'd expect someone who's had the most generic breakup ever to write. I'm going to stop commenting now for fear that I say something I will regret.
Re: Love by skaterdude396	15-Aug-02/5:34 PM
If you don't know what l33t means then you definitely aren't l33t. I am though.
Re: Love by skaterdude396	15-Aug-02/5:23 PM
This is the most original poeme I have ever read. The title is AMAZING. "Your eyes are like the ocean"... great line. "The way you walk / The way you talk"... great use of 'walk' to rhyme with 'talk'!!! Great work skaterdude396! Excellent, mate! Not only are you a way cool, l33t skate dude, you also have time for feelings! Because you know, feelings are important too, aren't they?
Re: Darkness by KathrynR	15-Aug-02/5:21 PM
Look, to be honest, I don't give a... care if she looks at them or not. I was simply "covering my behind". Which at the moment is uncovered, as you might expect. Good day to you, Sir.
Re: The Sea by Tarquin De La Bog	15-Aug-02/5:09 PM
Oh, Doylum. When will you learn that it's not who has the dog and the hotels, but how long it takes before one loses all one's money and throws the board across the room in anger?
Re: Darkness by KathrynR	15-Aug-02/5:07 PM
Well, would you suggest that KathrynR look at my poemes? I wouldn't. In fact I would suggest that she not look at them. P.S. This is my official stance, not my actual stance. Because I'm so incredibly zany and subversive that not only do I have an 'official' stance which differs from my 'real' stance, I wackily acknowledge this fact in public (no doubt in a stage whisper!!!!!!!!!!!!!)!!!!! P.P.S. These are the most hilarious misspellings yet! You've really hit my weak point! Congratulations on spotting that I really, genuinely do care about the spelling of my name! Because I do care! About the spelling! A lot! I do! Care! Come fly with me let's fly let's fly away...something something something something something something gay!!
Re: The Sea by Tarquin De La Bog	15-Aug-02/4:59 PM
Your hilarious misspelling of my name have me in stitches Doylum! Keep up the hilarious work!!!! P.S. I would have thought such an ironic person as yourself could SPOT A LITTLE FUCKING IRONY NOW AND THEN (LIKE IN THAT COMMENT TO HORUS8 I JUST DID THAT'S WHAT I MEAN!!!)
Re: Darkness by KathrynR	15-Aug-02/4:57 PM
Yes, here on poemsmilecomfortdon'tupsetanyoneranker we like to give people votes that reflect their effort, not their actual "achievement". Yes, yes, I know, it's ridiculous to expect an 11 year old to produce poems that are comparable to that of a talented and experienced adult. I mean well done and all, but what is the last line doing? I doubt that darkness is light's worst enemy. It may be its antithesis, but, like, do all binary relationships between personified elements of nature have to be (im)mortal emnity? Also, it's "light", not "lightness", just for future reference. Other comments: Lovely imagery about darkness's favourite game, but how many times have you actually been scared out of your wits by the dark bits in your notepads? Actually I liked that bit... personification is so absurd to begin with that making it more absurd can only be good. "Keep up the good work"!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! P.S. horus8 likes kids. Why not ask him for some poetic advice? P.P.S. Don't read my poemes. They're not suitable for larvae.
Re: The Sea by Tarquin De La Bog	15-Aug-02/4:24 PM
You need to sit down and take a chill pill. The reason I don't vote is this: It's completely pointless. Not only are votes regularly wiped out by poetes editing their poemes, and not only is any one person's vote washed away in a sea of bad judgment, but what function does it serve? What does it tell the poete about his poeme? Do high votes mean "it's good"? Do low votes mean "it's bad"? No. They do not. You and I both know that almost all of the poemes on this site have scores that are wildly incorrect. The author gains nothing; the voter gains nothing. That is why I don't vote. Perhaps you will find some vague, sarcastic, meaningless counterargument to that which nobody can argue against because there isn't anything to argue against, but perhaps you won't. Anyway. On to the rest of your really excellent comment. 1. I don't actually care what you feel about feeling. Was this addressed to me, or someone else, or just your awe-dience in general? Your constant fervent attempts to relate other people's poemes to your own incredibly exciting life are as about as stimulating as watching the results of you composing yet another pointless, carbon-copy "slam"-fest filled with (if we're lucky) images that are not original, evocative, salient, meaningful to anyone but you, or even considered. If we're not lucky, they're just filled with total bollocks. 2. Your life as an actor holds this much interest for me: nearly none. I say 'nearly' because once I did a search on 'horus8' to see if you really had done any acting. 3. Your fictions about the kale gun are this entertaining: not. 4. Please stop abusing the beak, as it is mine and I have promised to look after it. You may use the bastard inverted cousin of the beak since you appear to own it. 5. My name is "-=Dark_Angel=-" and I will thank you to address me as such. I have spent an unbelievable amount of time and money in court getting it legally changed and YOU WILL RESPECT IT. 6. Your stoned tourette's syndrome outbursts are, I'm sure, really great, but I for one have stopped reading them, and I don't really know if anyone does, so you might want to consider swearing at someone who cares. You can address your next comment essay to same. Have a good one!!!!
Re: The War by Tarquin De La Bog	15-Aug-02/3:45 PM
...like...I think war is being used as a metaphor for athletics, pdkafdhdah.
Re: love song by <~>	15-Aug-02/2:45 PM
Levels schmevels. Haven't you seen The Witches of Eastwick? How could anything be more sensual than Jack Nicholson and some stupid bird playing cello/violin?
Re: Monkeys by austimb	15-Aug-02/2:43 PM
If this poem didn't contain the word 'butts' I would be thoroughly disgusted.
Re: Heartsong by RobinGayle	15-Aug-02/2:42 PM
I have no heart, Sir, for it was taken from me in a Pigge Fight in 1374. Ah, yes, I remember that Fight well. It was me and Porky McFibbs the pig farmer on a sunny afternoon in the Belvedere suite, enjoying sherry and light chat on the poop deck... Oh, I do hope you'll forgive me, Sir. I must to towne at once to buy a Shoe-horne, for mine seems to have snapped in some sort of mating frenzy. Good day.
Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster	15-Aug-02/2:40 PM
If only you'd included 'beak' as a rhyme to 'weak'...so is this poeme about Cthulhu or what?
Re: Untitled by midnight	15-Aug-02/2:39 PM
We can never be rid of the ghosts who haunt us. Not on poemranker anyway.
Re: Afraid Of You (To Amber) by Lil_Chick_512	15-Aug-02/4:57 AM
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Re: The Word by Tascobar	15-Aug-02/4:29 AM
"In the beginning was the Word, and the Word was with God, and the Word was God. The same was in the beginning with God". I'll thank you to think about THAT the next time you write about The Word! Good day to you, Sir!