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Drowning (Other) by kat_boost
I play my music loud to drown out the shouting around me I can still see their faces but there is no sound The world is still spinning but my mind is still I???m fading into the background as the arguments break out in front of me Rocking in my corner staring at my wall Waiting for someone to notice Waiting for the call Sitting in the darkness in my world of pain Everything is happening over and over again All these changes are taking place They always get shoved right in my face My eyes are dark with sadness my heart empty with loneliness Thinking bout the day and how to change it My life is only just begging but it feels like it has ended You try to help me but you can???t You want to understand but you wont You try to listen but you don???t Looking round the room to find a way out All the exits are blocked there is no where to turn Trapped in my own mind With all the thoughts that hurt and scar so much They dig deep in my skin and heel slowly The dark make-up on my face hides my emotions The picture on my face is not the same as the one inside The picture is always changing getting darker and darker Cutting my self to relive the pain I find my self doing it over and over again My body is home to the darkness of the emotions I feel People try to bring out the colour but it is still dark inside The trees never blossom and the flowers never grow The hard droplets of ice fall to the ground mixed with the snow Thinking bout the times when everything seemed to glow It hurts when someone so near ignores your pleas Stamp on your emotions and say you???re a wanna-b I used to love him but now I am not so sure I wanted to go far but now I will never know Tears running down my face Take me away from this place Chuck me up into space Let me float and dye with out anyone knowing They wouldn???t even notice anyway Being me is more of job than a luxury The world I???m in is not a place I want to stay so take me away So take me away Take me away.

Up the ladder: Coloquy
Down the ladder: Mind Set Adrift

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.8
Weighted score: 4.9761596
Overall Rank: 8315
Posted: August 1, 2002 12:11 PM PDT; Last modified: August 1, 2002 12:11 PM PDT
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[5] yoda's aprentice @ 195.92.168.170 | 1-Aug-02/12:33 PM | Reply
youve got the talent but write something alot more people can relate to(although alot of people these days would relate) , be happy! i l;ike your style though good use of imagery!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 14-Aug-02/5:35 AM | Reply
This is bollocks of the worst possible kind. STOP. WRITING. TEENAGE. ANGST. POETRY. THAT. IS. EXACTLY THE SAME AS EVERY OTHER TEENAGE ANGST POETRY EVER WRITTEN. IT DOES NOT INTEREST ANYONE. YOU ARE WASTING YOUR TIME AND ALSO THE TIME OF ANYONE WHO READS YOUR POEM. I'M SURE YOUR EMOTIONS ARE HEARTFELT AND REAL AND TRUE. HOWEVER, THAT DOES NOT MAKE THEM WORTHY OF POETRY. YOU ARE NOT UNIQUE. YOU ARE NOT SPECIAL. THE SOONER YOU CEASE LABOURING UNDER THAT MISCONCEPTION THE SOONER YOU WILL BE ABLE TO PRODUCE STOMACHABLE POETRY.
[3] razorgrin @ 142.166.107.247 | 14-Aug-02/5:54 AM | Reply
This is just runny, poorly-applied eyeliner, a black t-shirt for that "mall-goth" effect and a 16-year-old screaming at her parents about how "no one understands". Bah.
[8] jauser @ 63.207.142.33 | 27-Oct-03/3:09 PM | Reply
Didn't read all of it but it was a good start.
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