| Re: Hinged by Imperfections |
23-Jan-03/12:42 PM |
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I like the way you've used hinges to symbolise your struggle to come to terms with abortion.
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23-Jan-03/3:51 PM |
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I think you mean "perilous". 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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25-Jan-03/1:31 PM |
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It's just a strength thing, you need to be patient
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26-Jan-03/5:35 AM |
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You should get this recorded! That chorus is completely ace!
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26-Jan-03/6:16 AM |
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Wait, don't tell me... is it you waking up after a heavy night with your face in a tramp's crapping arse?
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| Re: Melancholy Tale by aperfecttool77 |
28-Jan-03/12:10 AM |
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How is this a poeme? All you've done is written some prose and then added a line break after every clause. I'm sure you'll be a popular poete in no time!!!! 10
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| Re: Everything & Nothing by aperfecttool77 |
28-Jan-03/12:12 AM |
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| Re: Longing by galiana |
28-Jan-03/12:15 AM |
LOL YOU POSTED A POEME CALLED 'LONGING' RIGHT AFTER SOMEONE ELSE DID.
THIS IS TERRIBLE.
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28-Jan-03/12:17 AM |
WOW YOU'RE REALLY IN MY FACE WITH YOUR SWEARING.
1. Voices don't actually fill your head. Don't try to be crazy when you're clearly not.
2. You haven't led any past lives.
3. "Love that I did know" & "Only pain does show" are the worst two lines ever written, ever.
4. See above.
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28-Jan-03/12:31 AM |
Snot for the beak of fart
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Turding smell has choken noose
Queering all my reams
No bum shaving blows my stain
Or smears my truffled creams
Turding males now rearce my lech
As boysion dills my gayns
I quail in whorement, thigh for kelp
Wet holo I sustain
And wipe are poo brown by my hide
You clam-hair leather bend
My schmucking soap you spermed in swell
Goo lair-hive spleen-cunt hemmed
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28-Jan-03/12:39 AM |
ALL YOUR POEMES SOUND THE SAME;
THEY USE THE SAME RHYME SCHEME.
TRY TO USE A DIFFERENT ONE.
IT WILL MAKE YOU CREAM.
ALSO, YOU SHOULD PUNCTUATE.
IT MAKES YOU SEEM LESS THICK.
BLAH-DI-BLAH-DI-BLAH-DI-BLAH
DOO-DAH-DIDDLE DICK
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28-Jan-03/12:43 AM |
"User has to wait until 3-Feb-03/8:35 PM before posting new poetry."
PRAISE JESU
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| Re: Guilt by Freethinker1602 |
29-Jan-03/4:35 AM |
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Why are all your poemes so racist? Black people have just as much right to bask on this planet as you or I. But you won't even let them come out at night to feed. How dare you!?
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| Re: Despair by Caducus |
31-Jan-03/6:26 AM |
"Forgive me for the incapability of being unable to stop."
I want you to think very carefully about the meaning of that line, then ask yourself this
"Oh Christ! What have I done?"
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31-Jan-03/6:30 AM |
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Sometimes the wind blows in my armchair, too!
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| Re: Thursday by w~* ATHENA *~w |
31-Jan-03/6:56 AM |
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Yes, very good! It's not really the heroes that are heroes, but the people with disabilities who are heroes. Because their heroism isn't in the finger that pulls the trigger, or the foot that kicks someone in the groin, or the entire body that flies an F-19 stealth fighter straight into someone's face. It's in their hearts. It's in their souls. And it's in their hideously contorted facial expressions. Besides, I doubt most of them are even capable of pulling a trigger, let alone comprehending what the strange metallic object they hold in their hands is actually for. 10/10!
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| Re: A Little Nightmare by Teen14 |
1-Feb-03/7:25 AM |
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Great poeme, Teen14! I especially like your rhymings of "try" with "die", "friend" with "end", and "black" with... "hat". Keep up the good work! 10!!!!!!!!!
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| Re: Savior Self by OneFingerAnswer |
2-Feb-03/6:59 PM |
1. "Savior" is spelled "savior", not "savoir". "Savoir" is the French verb to know.
2. Jesu is the Savior. He never fell.
3. The second, third and fourth verses are complete nonsense. They don't make any sense. They're just random bits of angst that rhyme. Your heart doesn't beat on your spine. That doesn't even make sense as a metaphor.
4. It's perfectly possible to be able to help others but not help oneself. Indeede, one might argue that the idea of helping oneself is buncombe. One does not help oneself to go to the gentleman's chamber. One merely goes. I think you have become confused because of phrases like "Help yourself to some fucking pie." A similar principle applies to being a savior without being a self-savior.
This is a truly bad poeme. The only good part is the hilarious pun in the title. By 'hilarious' I mean 'skdhfajlsdfhlkasjhf'.
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| Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined |
2-Feb-03/7:09 PM |
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What the fuck is this? HUH? COOK PASS BABTRIDGE
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| Re: Life by marvelis |
2-Feb-03/7:14 PM |
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Get the fuck out of here. GET OUT OF MY FUCKING CAB.
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