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Savior Self (Lyric) by OneFingerAnswer Satan was head angel
Now King of Hell
You were my savoir
Until you fell
Gone are the memories
Of our days of joy
Here is the knowledge
Of your nasty ploy
Burnt with our pictures
My heart beats on my spine
After a few days
All will be fine
I can get over
Your evil ways
You never will
If the greed stays
Tourturing others
Making your own chains
Stealing from others
With no profit or gains
How can you help me
When you can't help yourself?
How can you be a savior
If you can't even save yourself?
Up the ladder:
Me and Mrs. Jones
Down the ladder:
Unemployed
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Posted: February 1, 2003 3:10 PM PST; Last modified: February 1, 2003 3:10 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7519 Comments:
1. "Savior" is spelled "savior", not "savoir". "Savoir" is the French verb to know.
2. Jesu is the Savior. He never fell. 3. The second, third and fourth verses are complete nonsense. They don't make any sense. They're just random bits of angst that rhyme. Your heart doesn't beat on your spine. That doesn't even make sense as a metaphor. 4. It's perfectly possible to be able to help others but not help oneself. Indeede, one might argue that the idea of helping oneself is buncombe. One does not help oneself to go to the gentleman's chamber. One merely goes. I think you have become confused because of phrases like "Help yourself to some fucking pie." A similar principle applies to being a savior without being a self-savior. This is a truly bad poeme. The only good part is the hilarious pun in the title. By 'hilarious' I mean 'skdhfajlsdfhlkasjhf'.
1. Uh oh a typo. God save us all.
2. Jesus is the savior only if you accept the Teachings of Chrisianity. I'm pretty sure he fell once or twice.I mean he was always walking everywhere on dirt roads. I'm sure he causght his foot on a rock or something. 3. When people who are as thin as me get excited or upset they feel their heart beating both on their back and on their ribs. The 4th stanza wasn't even metaphor. It's about as straight foreward as it gets. 4. Are you saying that one can't save him or herself? Poem. No e. Are you related to VP Dan?
2. Jesus is the savior whether or not you accept the Teachings of Christianity. And he is the savior whether or not he fell.
3. What is "making your own chains" supposed to mean? Isn't that a metaphor? Or are you talking about some sort of chain-manufacturer? 4. No, I'm saying that it's perfectly possible for someone to be capable of saving others without being capable of saving themselves, even if the idea of saving oneself makes sense. I do not know whether I am related to VP Dan, since I don't know who the fuck he is. I can't make sense of the previous two utterances since they don't contain a verb.
2. How is he the savior? If I don't accept it I'm not saved. If there's no sving to be done there is no savior.
3. That's not in the 2nd, 3rd, or 4th... that is what you said. 4. Would you want financial advise from a bum? I wouldn't and in the same way I wouldn't want some one with trouble being happy to try and help me be happy. Okay, I'll use complete senteces. The word is "poem." There is no "e" at the end. Get it now? If you're going to try to be a smartass make sure you get the smart part down first. Otherwise you simply become an ass.
2. He is still the savior whether or not you are saved.
3. Is "burnt with our pictures" a metaphor? 4. Whether or not someone incapable of saving themselves is likely to be very good at saving others doesn't matter. There are many possible situations in which someone is incapable of saving themselves but capable of saving someone else. The word I used was "poeme". You're right that there is no "e" at the end of "poem". It ends in "m". If you're going to try to correct my spelling, get the smart part down first. Otherwise you simply become an ass.
2. No, a savior saves something. Take away the act of saving and there is no savior.
3. Is that in the 4th stanza? 4. In the context of the poem it's not likely. Besides it's a question. Questions have answeres. You're assuming the answer is "I can't." I write poems. I put them on a site called poemranker. Is it poemeranker? Nope. You know why? Because it's a fucking poem. Get over yourself or you remain an ass.
2. Look man. If you don't want to accept Jesu into your heart, it's only you who's going to suffer. Don't take out your anger on me. Do yourself a favor and just start talking to him!
3. No, I don't believe it is. I'm glad I could help! 4. Yeah, I know it's a question. I was answering it for you. The answer is "in virtue of the fact that the ability to save oneself isn't a requirement for the ability to save others". That is a correct answer to the question in general, and it would be a perfectly good answer to give "in the context of the poem". If you want to call this a poem, fine. I would not call it a poem. I would call it a cab!!!!!!!!1 ASL
2. I turned down the offering of His hand long ago and I cannot find it in myself to look past the contradictions of the Bible to think that something written by men could save my life. If a man were to offer a book as long as a single book of the Bible he would be called a nut, not a prophet. I feel the same way about both Testaments. If I'm wrong I'll burn in Hell but I have a feeling the rest of you would be disappointed if there were anyway for your brain/mind/soul/Geist/whatever to register the fact that you got duped after you die.
3. It's about time you notice that the stanza I refered to is in fact metaphor free. 4. The question was "How?" not "Is it possible?" You did not provide an answer. You can call it what you will but I'm tired of responding to you. 235 view(s)
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