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Longing

Member since 2003 · Posted 27 Jan 2003 · 7 comments

in an abandoned palace a lady walks watching, waiting her love will not come again in golden days of youth long ago two figures used to dance in the warm days of summer spinning, twirling those times she visits now so far away from this winter cold, grey in the dusty rooms of a fairy castle she wanders aimlessly turning, turning looking for her love so calm his voice comforting, soothing she hears it now she lays her down despairing, weeping and prepares herself to die once again her love takes her warm, loving the last thing she sees is his face her love has come again.

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[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Jan-03/12:15 AM Reply

LOL YOU POSTED A POEME CALLED 'LONGING' RIGHT AFTER SOMEONE ELSE DID.

THIS IS TERRIBLE.

[n/a] galiana › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Jan-03/12:17 AM Reply

He posted after I did, actually. Ought I to have called the poem "A reply to tonight's mood: Dedicated to He Whom I Have Not?" I'll gladly change the title for you, if you wish. :)

[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › galiana 28-Jan-03/12:37 AM Reply

That sounds like a great idea!!!!1

[3] poetandknowit › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Jan-03/10:35 AM Reply

I have been meaning to ask you since your lovely debate with the Iowa fellow: Which Hawking kid are you?

[3] horus8 28-Jan-03/12:44 AM Reply

than like a weird flaming alien finds me having gay midget sex in vegas with a theoretical math problem turned flesh, and the waitress says, "care for an olive you greek freak," and i'm like beatch WHATEVER! BA NAH NAH DA NA DA NA NA
BA NAH NAH DA NA DA NA NA CUZ I LIVE IN THE DIVEDED STATE OF NOSTALGIA THE DIVEDED STATE ODERFUSCIA WHATEVER...all i can say is in five hours i will be snowboarding down a gorgeous alpine mountain carving it up...WHATEVER HA! urp... ?

[4] nentwined 28-Jan-03/1:14 AM Reply

why do you switch form near the end? it wasn't entirely pleasing, but it worked better in solidarity, at least.

nothing here for me, though.

[3] poetandknowit 28-Jan-03/10:33 AM Reply

Great knowledge of adjectives!!