Re: The Legend of the Crow by TLRufener	12-Dec-05/7:58 PM
I never look at the votes or comments, but I would be suprised if anyone thought this mustered anything higher than my generous 3...sorry...it sucks in general, and really is lame, to be specific.
Re: Ionic Winter by david	12-Dec-05/7:55 PM
Lose the Macbeth reference, fill in the blank with something else;I don't see the relevance of it. I'd like to know what she said 'fine' to. Answer that, and replace Macbeth, and I might see my way to a higher score. I like the general flavour of it.
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	12-Dec-05/11:17 AM
chthonic, subfusc, oneiric, alpenglow, lambent, prestidigitation,...whew...I hate having to get out the dictionary to look up words in the middle of reading!...are these all real words, or have you made one up?(prestidigitation) and is chthonic said 'Ku-tho-nick'? Was this some maniacal English teacher's assignment? To use these words correctly in a poem? Okay...that said...cool poem. However, I think that English teacher would say that a comma should be used here and there. (Ex:Their blindness like ours is begotten) and period usage is sketchy at best (Ex:But in the land of sand and dust.) But...I am not an English teacher, and since you said all this with such flair I will give it a decwent score. However, I can't give you a high score, since you use words such as worms and dust,(among others) that speak with such grit, but then threw in those $10.00 words. It would have been more accessible without them. That said...Amen!
Re: a comment on Indian Song by ALChemy	12-Dec-05/11:02 AM
Okay...then might I challenge you to make two versions that make sense standing independently? In a new one, of course!
Re: Due Consideration by Dovina	11-Dec-05/10:04 AM
An urgent whisper...remind me of one of mine> see new post...lol.
Re: Due Consideration by Dovina	11-Dec-05/9:56 AM
Oh, didn't get my vote in...sorry!...here I was commenting without voting...oops...thought I had. I have to say all the discussion in this post has been most entertaining...and enlightening. As to my comment of cannibalism: it is not meant as a bad thing; actually taking bits and pieces, ideas, and thoughts that get started, from others, is what fuels the creative fire, so to speak. In this way we feed on others, everyone, and everything. Any writer who states he is not a parasite is a lair. We digest what we read, hear, feel, see, experience, see others experience...and then we write...from where? That depository called the brain. Can we claim everything in there as solely our own?...of course not! How many times I have delved and devoured with hunger what I found within another...with the thought a satisfaction above most others...knowing it had inspired something that I would later revel in...relishing the process of defining or painting within words! I love the challenge of creating something as rich as the situation inspired. LilMsLadyPoet...who eats with sensual relishment...then, with a flourish, licks her fingers clean afterwards!
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	11-Dec-05/9:32 AM
I suspect more of a problem that involves spewing...
Re: a comment on A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	11-Dec-05/9:28 AM
Zodiac, no...I didn't know the story...thanks.
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	21-Nov-05/3:00 PM
carnivorous bunch, writers; especially poets. see my 'Let me". But at least we admit we are a brutal bunch..actually revel in it....no shame.
Re: a comment on A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	21-Nov-05/2:57 PM
...sigh...thanks.
Re: a comment on A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	21-Nov-05/2:53 PM
two, even.
Re: a comment on A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	21-Nov-05/2:53 PM
I wondered that too...it isn't clear...is this tow females, or a male and female? and I wasn't sure what the favourite sweet refered to.
Re: There is a journey tree by ALChemy	18-Oct-05/12:01 PM
Zodiac is right, about the usage of 'stands amidst' and brink/waterfall, brinks/waterfalls. but be careful of 'that ends'...alot of s's. You go from talking about the birds...(Which I think is very cool, BTW.) to talking about the tree's leaves, again. ('Its leaves'The transition there left me unclear for a second. I wonder if the bird thing would work better as the ending, that way you concentrate on the tree, then pan up to the birds above it. Some puncutation would be helpful. I like this piece...and I believe there is always a 'tree', of some sort or another, even if it is only the one I construct in my mind's eye.
Re: Low Tide by somemorepoetry	18-Oct-05/11:49 AM
It starts out good, and some good stuff throughout it, but it kinda falls apart on me, in the middle...it gets all unlcear...and then the last line is cool.
Re: a comment on How Angels Smell by Dovina	18-Oct-05/11:29 AM
Only English in the bloodline, never been there...but...flavour suggests, well, more flavour than the American-English flavor, don't you think? I also prefer grey to gray, and colour to color. It just seems richer...more full of flavour and colour when spelled the Olde English way. (Should those both end with e's? (I AM a descendant of Mary Stuart...and am intoxicated by David Bowie...does that count? LOL!)
Re: How Angels Smell by Dovina	28-Sep-05/12:04 PM
The last stanza didn't have the same flavour as the first two....felt it was kinda lacking there.
Re: My Big Butt by Dovina	13-Sep-05/6:49 PM
Okay, not cute as in darling...but as in amusing in a "Yeah, my butt is big; so what?! kinda way. And...I DO get tired of big women who throw their weight around, purposefully positioning themselves in such a way as to make me move from where I was standing. It is an invasion of my body space and I resent it. I resent even more when they seemingly do not see me or think they can walk Over me, literally. It seems some bigger people fully expect a smaller person to move out of the way...and to me, that is a bullying behaviour.
Re: the birds are bugs by ay deee	13-Sep-05/12:06 PM
use some punctuation and some editing clean it up and i might even like it maybe because it is a peak into a neat thing that happened or at least it seems like that i wondered if it was about cicadas but maybe you are talking about some other bug i cant believe you thought they were birds anyway work on this poem because as you should be able to tell by now without punctuation it makes things hard to read and interpret.
Re: to all of you by Heather Dee	13-Sep-05/12:01 PM
Well, I am gald you are feeling relieved....and glad you plan to keep trying.
Re: On the road by flatliner	13-Sep-05/11:59 AM
burn> burned... all to> just to?... i> I Not bad.