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21-Oct-02/9:59 AM |
Hmmm... you definitely do need help, I agree...
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21-Oct-02/10:00 AM |
Hee hee. Methinks we've found the John Cage of Poemranker... Much better than the others.
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Re: The generosity of others. by darby pyn |
21-Oct-02/10:01 AM |
'Hang the messenger' is excellent. Nice twist on the normal phrase.
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Re: Strong by little_angel_maria |
21-Oct-02/10:05 AM |
Can we discriminate against Asians? And don't forget that your dear friend blade will want to drink your blood. I fail to see how you will stop me from being rude, saying your poems are crap (this one actually seems a bit better than the others. Would almost make an amusing song, with some work), or killing America.
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21-Oct-02/10:08 AM |
Right, here's hoping my vote won't entail a new edit...
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Re: angel by little_angel_maria |
21-Oct-02/10:10 AM |
These works of yours really would read much better as songs than as poems, somehow.
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21-Oct-02/5:35 PM |
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Re: My Friend? by Blade |
21-Oct-02/5:37 PM |
This must be the most idiotic thing ever posted on this site -- including all the various rants from people leaving. If 'twas at least well-written, and amusing -- but this is beneath contempt.
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Re: Never more by Mutant_X |
21-Oct-02/6:12 PM |
-=Dark_Angel=-, one would think you'd like something that's such shite.
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Re: requiem for an ex-girlfriend by natalie |
21-Oct-02/6:50 PM |
OH MY GOD!!! Another student!!! Will Blabbitt survive? I find it needs work, especially from 'because cancer was' onwards.
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Re: Playing Games by ThoughtfulSoul |
21-Oct-02/6:52 PM |
'Tallying' the points, I assume. And it should be 'would HAVE told me'. Sorry. I'm a pedant.
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22-Oct-02/11:12 AM |
I can't help it, with the way I speak, I find it extremely difficult to make 'China' rhyme with 'climber'. Maybe if you spelt it 'climbah' I'd prefer it. Amusing, though.
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22-Oct-02/11:13 AM |
In full agreement with God's Wife here. The second is particularly annoying.
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22-Oct-02/11:15 AM |
I don't find it absurd enough. And the rhymes are a bit clunky. But 'tis silly, and that is good.
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22-Oct-02/11:18 AM |
I'll take Wilde's version of the same images, thanks.
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Re: Regime Change by Nicholas Jones |
22-Oct-02/11:24 AM |
The sentiments are admirable, but the saying of them needs work.
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Re: Baked Peach Cobbler Windowed by horus8 |
22-Oct-02/11:25 AM |
At first, I read 'Prodding me with the big cat'. I like that image. Not that the rest is bad.
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Re: Just For Today by apples_tim |
22-Oct-02/11:42 AM |
'Gather ye rosebuds while ye may'... didn't Herrick write that? About five hundred years ago? And I'll take pride in my madness if I want to, thank you very much.
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Re: witch's bliss by crin |
22-Oct-02/11:44 AM |
'Killing little white lies...' I like that.
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22-Oct-02/11:46 AM |
Second to last stanza extremely weak.
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