Re: ... by logun2002ya	6-Nov-02/6:10 AM
Eye hate to tell you this, but you haven't improved.
Re: Train by oohv	6-Nov-02/6:12 AM
You get points for 'Pokemon herpes'.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Nov-02/6:14 AM
Needs music.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Nov-02/6:17 AM
This is a terrible piece. Not that I beat any more adoration for the lady than you, but this is a terribly bad poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Nov-02/6:22 AM
Hmm... what a thought that I'd ever say this to you. I think it needs a litle tweaking, but I couldn't tell you why. I just get the feeling it could be a tad batter. Maybe it's because I don't particularly care for Campobello or something like that.
Re: Fit for a King by dougsoderstrom	6-Nov-02/11:59 AM
This is tripe. Tripe tripe tripe. Somebody should feed you to Sharon.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Nov-02/12:17 PM
One more bad poem? Yup. Days don't turn to years, they turn to weeks, which turn to months, which turn to years. Non mais.
Re: VINTAGE by bonsaimirror	6-Nov-02/3:12 PM
The first line is magnificent. The rest puerile.
Re: i am genius personified by bondjedi	6-Nov-02/3:13 PM
Strangely, I actually like this. How very bizarre. And because I am evil I will vote anyone.
Re: Cantos part mmx (The Mud Poem) by bondjedi	6-Nov-02/3:14 PM
Alas, -=Dark_Angel=- wannabe, you fail.
Re: Returning by INTRANSIT	6-Nov-02/3:15 PM
Did you have to ruin it with the last stanza?
Re: Returning by INTRANSIT	6-Nov-02/6:15 PM
The last stanza still ruins it. Especially the line in capitals.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Nov-02/8:25 PM
This is really quite magnificent.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Nov-02/8:27 PM
This is good. I can't give you full marks on your poems because there's something in your style (the line breaks and enjambments) I just can't bring myself to like, but don't feel bad about it, I do that to some of my favourite writers on here.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Nov-02/9:45 AM
Since when it bin Laden a dictator? Just because Bush thinks he and Hussein are the same person does not make it so.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Nov-02/11:36 AM
Tasty.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Nov-02/11:37 AM
'As slender suicides'... Brilliant. Sheer brilliance. Reminds me of a line in Nabokov's 'Pale Fire', but who cares about that?
Re: I remenber by little_angel_maria	7-Nov-02/11:51 AM
So, you realised you had to mature. Dare I ask why you decided not to?
Re: Perversions by razorgrin	7-Nov-02/7:55 PM
EEEEWWWW! You're so sick! You're a horrible horrible person and I hope you get kicked off this site and I'm going to set the police on you! These aren't funny at all, these people are all perverts, how can you write about perverts, you must be really wierd. Mommy told me to stay away from people like you. They're all ick! On a slightly more serious note, the second isn't up to the framing ones.
Re: Necromantic Boo-boo by razorgrin	7-Nov-02/7:59 PM
Your friends run amok too. You and your insane social circle. Let us hope the zombies hold their liquor as well as your friends. I somehow suspect they're all going to visit the liquor store. Remind them that the Scotch is mine, please.