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5-Nov-02/11:30 AM |
This is terrible. Limonade, you're far too kind some times. Hmm, is 'truelly' there for 'truly' or for 'cruelly', I wonder.
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5-Nov-02/11:30 AM |
Sometimes, girls, I'm glad I'm in a different town.
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5-Nov-02/11:33 AM |
I know it's ridiculous to hope for an explanation, but why the capital letters and quotation marks for the last word? Is your heart not real? Is it standing in for something else? Actually, you could go somewhere with the quotation marks around 'heart'. Though I find the rest a bit hopeless. Ah well. I'm just a bastard at heart, I guess.
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Re: Alien by Mutant_X |
5-Nov-02/11:39 AM |
You're 'stock on earth'? Yum. Are you better with noodles or with rice?
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Re: Bedside Angel by feathers68 |
5-Nov-02/11:42 AM |
Gadzooks. The badness. It's almost palpable.
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Re: Creep into my heart by mozac |
5-Nov-02/11:43 AM |
When drums are rolling, they have no beat. It's a single wave of sound.
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Re: Head-on Collision (True story) by t_t_redhot |
5-Nov-02/11:45 AM |
The ladies have said it all. 'So I have move on'? What?
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Re: I Love You, My Angel by mytenderrage |
5-Nov-02/11:46 AM |
'Your arms wrap around my FIGURE'? Even by the standards of pimple poetry, that's bad.
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5-Nov-02/11:48 AM |
If you must write a bad limerick, could you at least make the second line fit the rhythm?
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Re: HATE by Blade |
5-Nov-02/11:50 AM |
This actually made me laugh out loud. Congratulations. If I thought you meant it to, I'd give you a ten.
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Re: untitled by bluwiz |
5-Nov-02/12:00 PM |
I can't help it. The first lines are far too redolent of Shakespeare's 'Timon of Athens' for me.
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Re: you are my concert by snacktime |
5-Nov-02/12:06 PM |
Bravo for knowing how to use musical imagery. Even more bravo for knowing how to use the word 'crescendo'.
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Re: untitled2 by PunchMeInTheFace |
5-Nov-02/12:09 PM |
Congratulations. You make me WANT to punch you in the face. Bravo for this piece, which is a magnificent work for getting others to fulfil your desire to get a broken nose. It actually looks as though it might be good. But cut it up, fer gawd's sake, cut it up!
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5-Nov-02/12:10 PM |
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5-Nov-02/12:12 PM |
This reminds me of some of Guillevic's poetry (one of my favourite French poets, died in 1997). Just in the structure. But why the title?
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5-Nov-02/12:17 PM |
As someone quite heathen, I wish to vehemently protest the discrimination and political uncorrectnes of the fifth line. And I probably could put a price on your words, sir.
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Re: OUR FUTURE? by kliq |
5-Nov-02/12:21 PM |
Babies are made, but they still burn, dearie. Easily.
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Re: Music by oohv |
5-Nov-02/7:11 PM |
Cut it up so that it's readable and I'll consider reading it.
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Re: rules by roses are read |
5-Nov-02/7:43 PM |
Are those actually line breaks or is it a prose poem? I can't quite tell.
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Re: ... by logun2002ya |
6-Nov-02/6:09 AM |
'You are my vision/of perfect sweet'... You ARE an imbecile.
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