Poemranker [Poem: Bedside Angel] [by feathers68] Thu Nov 21 19:38:18 PST 2024

Bedside angel born of heaven, the heaven of touch, the heart of healing. Warm caresses ease my pain. Heated flesh and soul to heal. Bedside angel pulls me near, soft warm flesh does caress the need with in my battered soul. The warmth to heal the cold with in. Bedside angel calls to me, if not forever this caress will glide upon my broken muscles stretched, For now is enough, it will have to do. Bedside angel I am left wanting more.

[1] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 4-Nov-02/11:20 AM | Reply

this is just awful.

[n/a] feathers68 @ 216.209.172.18 > <~> | 13-Nov-02/5:40 PM | Reply

Don't supose you could elaborate?

[1] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > feathers68 | 14-Nov-02/7:09 AM | Reply

well, you use images that are so overused--angels and heaven, for example--and you bring nothing new to the reader. if you are left wanting more, tell us why? give us ssomething new. show us how your lover pleases you. reading this poem is like hearing someone say 'isn't it nice out today' when it's 80 and sunny there's a slight breeze. you state the obvious, and you do it obviously. try describing these experience with words that have texture, or smell, or taste...that's what left you hungry, right?
sorry i was rude.

[0] Tintagiles @ 198.164.238.88 | 5-Nov-02/11:42 AM | Reply

Gadzooks. The badness. It's almost palpable.

[n/a] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.116 | 6-Nov-02/6:28 AM | Reply

The badness is quite palpable. it's like ectoplasm, but it smells like cat pee.

[n/a] feathers68 @ 216.209.172.18 > razorgrin | 13-Nov-02/5:41 PM | Reply

Don't think human's can make cat pee! how about something else!

[3] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Nov-02/1:16 PM | Reply

that isn't cat pee. it's the cat.

[1] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > horus8 | 12-Nov-02/1:19 PM | Reply

nope. it's the pee, fer shure.

[n/a] feathers68 @ 216.209.172.18 > horus8 | 13-Nov-02/5:43 PM | Reply

NOPE no pee at all but lots of other stuff! Men can not pee cat pee! and by the way putting that you deserve any comment back! your right your brain is scrambled!