Re: a comment on Ignorant Children by Stacy Stewart	5-May-05/4:02 PM
This was of course my first attempt at spoken word. I tried to shorten it up a little so it doesn't seem so draged on. Thanks, I understand what you guys are saying.
Re: a comment on Oceans love song by Stacy Stewart	11-Mar-05/4:30 PM
The last 2 lines I didn't put in at first. But when I read it back I thought something was missing and so this how the last two lines were created. Weak yes, but for now they work untill I can think of something better. But Yes I agree with what you are saying.
Re: a comment on Affairs by Stacy Stewart	6-Jan-05/11:03 PM
what is our world with out love and compassion? So w/ that being said when you find that one somebody and then they betray you we are back at square one again.... This is why I wrote the words downfall to man. As for the emotion leading up to this: "utteringthe words of complete chaos (I LOVE YOU) that ignites unholy thoughts (thinking of the other person), unveiling inner desires kept dormant in our sleep. Dreaming of worlds where the candles are lit and roses mean something to us." ( dreaming of being w/ the other person) for now the love is not drawn towards the partner but drawn towards the other person...
Re: a comment on Affairs by Stacy Stewart	6-Jan-05/7:17 PM
"tis" has been edited since it was the wrong word to use i suppose. But embers sofly spoken is correct.....what are embers but burning pieces of wood...what noice do they make...crakling. Instead of saying crackling i used softly spoken. For the downfall of man, the whole poem leads up to this, for the poem itself is talking about love....and with love that is not "perfect" you have an affair....for that is where the downfall part came in. Did this clear things up a bit?
Re: Happy by Acid_moose	3-Jan-05/11:05 AM
This reminded me of Gacy. With the whole Killing Kids and being a clown thing. I liked it!
Re: Reality by blacksoul	16-Dec-04/1:58 PM
what in god's name is this? Not a Haiku!
Re: A smile by Bobjim	16-Dec-04/1:15 PM
Reminds me of a poem I wrote in the second grade... It has no imagination once so ever.
Re: Hurt by Princess_Snowflake	13-Dec-04/9:36 AM
You have to many mistakes in here. The rhyme is off. Alot of your sentances don't make sence. Example: that has caught your own eye and makes you think it's better than it was. that has cought your eye etc etc...Reread this poem and fix the mistakes.
Re: My Life As a Single Teenage Girl by Princess_Snowflake	13-Dec-04/9:32 AM
This is not a Haiku A haiku has 5,7,5 and is about nature Say the count was right then it would be a Senriu, those are about humans.
Re: Cassandra. by SupremeDreamer	8-Dec-04/7:26 AM
Aahh I'm going through this right now: Believes HE can seduce me with a dance Clings to me and purrs and ultimately fails. To put it bluntly it this poem was a car your transmission just slipped. Overall I thought this poem was lacking in rhythm.
Re: Dancing in Memories: Slipping Away In The House On The Hill by Stacy Stewart	8-Dec-04/5:18 AM
My own version of: MUSIC SWIMS BACK TO ME By: Anne Sexton.
Re: The ABC's Of Adultery by horus8	8-Dec-04/4:33 AM
Finally ending in the the ABC's of Divorce.