Re: a comment on Darker Days by oneglove	27-Mar-06/8:56 AM
its revised. i left bleeding skies because thats how i imagine the sunset in the context of the poem. even the beautiful memory is still pointing towards the final 'murder scene'
Re: a comment on Darker Days by oneglove	24-Feb-06/7:50 AM
yeah, i agree with you. the line is from lifestyles of the rich and famous, i put it there for unexplainable reasons. i was just having funw ith it but youre right, it takes a way from the poem. i'll get around to changing it but not right now.
Re: a comment on The Incubation by oneglove	6-Dec-05/8:51 AM
which definition did you intend for this poem?
Re: a comment on Sienna by oneglove	16-Nov-05/2:13 PM
wow, thank you.
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	15-Nov-05/12:15 PM
unfortunatly, it appears to have ended that way.
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	15-Nov-05/8:14 AM
that sounds good, i hope to see it sometime
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/6:28 PM
unfortuntly mine seems to too
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/5:12 PM
good job with the science lesson. obviously the only reason there even needs to be a distinction of true north is because of the magnetic north of the compass. good thing the figurative heart compass points to true love and not just magnetic love, huh?
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/2:52 PM
beyond hearing the phrase "the face that launched a thousand ships" i havent read the poem to go a long with it. so if the rest of the poem has anything to do with original than its coincidence. i was hardly trying to pass off the line as my own invention but merely referencing it as a starting point for my own thoughts.
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/2:46 PM
i hope it wasnt too hard to get that out, and it's fine that you think so, i'll agree its not my best work. it was posted awhile ago, and written long before that. but there is a sudden surge in interest for whatever reason.
Re: a comment on Abba by oneglove	14-Nov-05/7:45 AM
point taken
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/7:44 AM
i like his mustache
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/7:44 AM
i know what the other version is, i thought i'd make it my own
Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove	14-Nov-05/12:28 AM
its a play on true north
Re: a comment on Abba by oneglove	13-Nov-05/11:24 PM
words of advice that dont make sense at the time can stay with us until years later when it finally becomes clear and can help guide us. i felt like there needed to be a break somewhere in the poem and that felt like the best place.
Re: Multiplicity the Hallucination by vulcan	27-Oct-05/12:14 AM
huh?
Re: Was Everyone Put On This Earth For A Reason by cabot	14-Oct-05/2:56 PM
yeah the spelling and grammer is a big problem, it's distracting from the rest of the poem, which is alright.
Re: Small Furies by Enkidu	5-Oct-05/1:02 AM
awesome flow there were just a couple lines that seemed forced to keep in rhyme, make her dead and destroyed no doubt are the 2 that really didnt work for me. other than that i'm really impressed, its just so smooth and complete.
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	10-May-05/5:05 PM
this story really drew me in, though like youve said there are parts that could use revision. i understand though, sometimes its more important just to get it all down than to perfect each phrase.
Re: a comment on the victory by oneglove	10-May-05/3:49 PM
agreed