its revised. i left bleeding skies because thats how i imagine the sunset in the context of the poem. even the beautiful memory is still pointing towards the final 'murder scene'

yeah, i agree with you. the line is from lifestyles of the rich and famous, i put it there for unexplainable reasons. i was just having funw ith it but youre right, it takes a way from the poem. i'll get around to changing it but not right now.

which definition did you intend for this poem?

wow, thank you.

unfortunatly, it appears to have ended that way.

that sounds good, i hope to see it sometime

unfortuntly mine seems to too

good job with the science lesson. obviously the only reason there even needs to be a distinction of true north is because of the magnetic north of the compass. good thing the figurative heart compass points to true love and not just magnetic love, huh?

beyond hearing the phrase "the face that launched a thousand ships" i havent read the poem to go a long with it. so if the rest of the poem has anything to do with original than its coincidence. i was hardly trying to pass off the line as my own invention but merely referencing it as a starting point for my own thoughts.

i hope it wasnt too hard to get that out, and it's fine that you think so, i'll agree its not my best work. it was posted awhile ago, and written long before that. but there is a sudden surge in interest for whatever reason.

point taken

i like his mustache

i know what the other version is, i thought i'd make it my own

its a play on true north

words of advice that dont make sense at the time can stay with us until years later when it finally becomes clear and can help guide us. i felt like there needed to be a break somewhere in the poem and that felt like the best place.

agreed