Crikey, where do I begin with this one? I really like this poem, the first and last stanzas shine very brightly for me. 'Caviar dreams' I swear I've seen before, which is a bit of a shame as it detracts slightly from the overall originality of the piece. The same applies to 'bleeding skies'; in my opinion the second stanza could do with a reworking to bring it to the standard of the other two.
The final stanza is fantastic, perhaps 'I love you' should be in quote marks?
'Twin sapphires set in snow/Look like a murder scene'.
8 for now, with a rework of stanza two this will be at least a nine.

Have you read "Savvy in the City: San Francisco" by Jane Young, especially page 4?

Steamer trunks of darker days, speaks of perhaps the Titanic, and twin saphires set in snow of perhaps a skull. I think of deep dives into ocean and memories and a good read.

Screamed 'I love you' sounds a little forced. It's as if someone was forcing them to do it.

How about altering the last two lines to:
'Once they cried 'I love you',
Now they only cry.'

then you get a little word-play on 'cry' as well. it would require changing the rhyme though. :-)

Once I read this poem a couple of times & also read the other comments on it, I see, I see. Very metaphorical, very well thought-out...like a heist or "murder scene" even. A great read none-the-less with deep metaphor, dramatic theme, words that grab, short but punctual. Emily Dickinson style. Great read!