| Re: a comment on Deep Midnight Blues by oneglove |
12-Mar-08/5:18 AM |
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no. that question makes absolutely no sense.
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| Re: Whore of Babylon by oneglove |
7-Dec-07/9:24 AM |
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work in progress, just felt like posting something since i havent in so long
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| Re: a comment on Take-Off by oneglove |
13-Jun-07/5:24 PM |
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Oops I meant to caps all of them
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| Re: a comment on A New Deal (Rewrite) by oneglove |
13-Mar-07/3:16 AM |
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i had no idea the bonus army march washington was well-worn, in fact i had never heard of it until just before writing this.
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| Re: A New Deal by oneglove |
22-Feb-07/10:20 PM |
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based on the bonus march during the depression. i've been fighting with it but it's a work in progress, it just feels generally weak to me. so i guess i'm mainly looking for some help.
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| Re: a comment on Blue, Black & White by oneglove |
3-Jan-07/8:47 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Blue, Black & White by oneglove |
3-Jan-07/8:46 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Blue, Black & White by oneglove |
3-Nov-06/1:51 PM |
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By no means do I think you're stupid, I was just trying to clarify what you said. And I agree that it has the meter of a song, but I am no musician so that's why I labeled it a free verse. I hope you take advantage of any blues you find along 61
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| Re: a comment on Blue, Black & White by oneglove |
2-Nov-06/10:34 PM |
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are you saying the poem doesn't make sense? Perhaps you don't understand the poem, but believe me it makes sense. If you're struggling to tie things together the last two lines should help.
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| Re: a comment on Blue, Black & White by oneglove |
28-Oct-06/10:09 AM |
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this is true, maybe one of these days i'll get around to learning how to play the guitar sitting in the corener of my room and it will truly be a lyric
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| Re: a comment on Soup Can by oneglove |
22-Sep-06/6:35 AM |
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bruce almighty what a garbage movie. the title is in reference to the play between beauty and plain. when warhol painted a soup can and it became art it changed the perspectives of something beautiful. just as in his personal life he strove to find acceptance about his physical attributes until he finally realized he was different and embraced it.
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| Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33 |
4-Aug-06/6:44 AM |
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go on girl, i like reading this in a whispery voice like i'm in nkotb
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| Re: a comment on Paradise by oneglove |
4-Aug-06/5:54 AM |
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i really need to spell check everything i write
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| Re: Paradise by oneglove |
4-Aug-06/5:42 AM |
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i suppose i will explain this poem a bit, it was inspired by On the Road. As a nod to the book it was written stream of conscience and the last line and some of the imagery about the eyes are from the book (it is also named after the narrator). i liked that after 300 pages of traveling sal falls in love and settles down in a couple sentences. so this was an exploration of that moment, a revision would almost definitely help it because it was written so quickly, and sorry for misspelling manhattan.
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| Re: a comment on I Never Promised You a Rose Garden by oneglove |
19-Jun-06/2:36 PM |
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well the flower symbolizes the ideals of the movement, that those with the ability to speak out against opression had a responsiblity to. the petals symbolize the martyrs. they all gave their lives for all of those without a voice. though the men of faith were gone, God still loved the oppressed and the November murders were the beginning of the end of the war.
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| Re: a comment on I Never Promised You a Rose Garden by oneglove |
19-Jun-06/2:26 PM |
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| Re: a comment on I Never Promised You a Rose Garden by oneglove |
17-Jun-06/6:41 AM |
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excellent suggestions, consider it changed.
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| Re: a comment on I Never Promised You a Rose Garden by oneglove |
2-Jun-06/9:22 AM |
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actually i didnt know linda anderson sang it, it's been covered by others though. this is about the slaying of 6 priests, their maid and her daughter by the government in el salvador in 1989. there is now a rose garden planted in the field where they were lined up and killed. the contrast between the red rose petals and blood stained lawn really struck me.
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| Re: a comment on FM.PM by oneglove |
1-Jun-06/11:29 PM |
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so i changed the first two stanzas, which meant i took out the first stanza you seemed to like and removed the you're beautifuls you didnt. the main reason for changing it was my extreme dislike for the feel of the first two verses. see what you think.
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| Re: a comment on Darker Days by oneglove |
27-Mar-06/9:33 AM |
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i'm glad i could conjour up such a pleasent memories for you. in all actuality, its about sifting through an old box of pictures and getting lost in the good memories of a relationship. in those moments it can be easy to forget why the relationship is over. twin sapphires refer to blue eyes, the murder scene, the blood shot whites of the eye.
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