| Re: Crack baby by Caducus |
6-Jul-05/8:30 AM |
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Ahh, drugs. super. Ever seen a crack baby? ghastly.
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6-Jul-05/8:30 AM |
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6-Jul-05/8:35 AM |
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mnnnmmnnnhhhnnnnuuuuuuuuugg
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| Re: Crying Tears with No Home by TLRufener |
7-Jul-05/9:30 AM |
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Not terrible but the grammtical and spelling mistakes are very noticeable. If you're going to write a poem in honor of your friend, you should at least take the ime to proofread it.
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11-Jul-05/11:13 AM |
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Has it escaped your attention that nobody likes puns?
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| Re: Almost Persuaded by Dovina |
11-Jul-05/11:28 AM |
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Good rhymes. Not wild about the poem itself, but I'll give you a 6 for that.
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| Re: A World At War by Damien |
11-Jul-05/11:32 AM |
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If you're going to write about something like this...and be as graphic as you have, for God sakes, man, don't rhyme.
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| Re: JUST A FEW by rbooey |
11-Jul-05/11:37 AM |
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Please refer to my reply to your comment on the suggestions page for my reason for giving this a 0.
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11-Jul-05/11:38 AM |
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You're one of the few people here that actually seem to be learning how to write.
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| Re: Slice Open My Body by TLRufener |
11-Jul-05/11:39 AM |
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boo. You can and have done better.
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| Re: Endurance by Dovina |
11-Jul-05/11:40 AM |
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I kind of like this...despite what the general consensus seems to be..gotta go with my gut..
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| Re: Flies in the ointment. by darby pyn |
11-Jul-05/11:43 AM |
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I'm confused as hell on this one.
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| Re: When my place is placeless by Prince of Void |
11-Jul-05/11:44 AM |
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11-Jul-05/11:46 AM |
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You need to be able to connect all this a little better. It sounds good, but a lot of it feels like it's just jumping from place to place.
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11-Jul-05/11:47 AM |
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11-Jul-05/11:48 AM |
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This was kind of good whe I read it real fast.
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11-Jul-05/11:49 AM |
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| Re: a.m. by oneglove |
11-Jul-05/11:49 AM |
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| Re: Yield by wilco |
12-Oct-05/6:27 AM |
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Better than anything you've written in a long while.
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