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Crying Tears with No Home (Free verse) by TLRufener In memory of Lance 1986 â 2005
Alone again crying tears with no home
For someone who has their life cut short.
None did wrong or made mistakes,
It was just their time to move on.
I have yet again to wonder why they leave so soon,
When it seems that their lives just got going.
Dying with so much time left,
So much knowledge to share with the world,
So much love to confess
And so many experiences never known.
Never getting to see the world
They had planned so many times to explore,
Never going to college and earning that degree,
Or meeting the love of their life.
Struck down in their prime without a second glance,
So many thoughts yearning to be shared.
Alone again wishing for
Another chance to see that smiling face,
To see those sparkling eyes;
Eyes that now are forever closed.
Crying tears with no home
For a young soul ripped from the physical world.
A young soul that never made it to the ends of the Earth
To fulfill its life-long dream.
Up the ladder:
Tribute
Down the ladder:
Beautiful Mistake
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Posted: June 29, 2005 9:09 PM PDT; Last modified: July 7, 2005 10:01 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8340096 Overall Rank: 10762 Comments:
I don't want to comment on the serious topic here.
just that I didn't like the poem. the sentiment is understandable though.
Not terrible but the grammtical and spelling mistakes are very noticeable. If you're going to write a poem in honor of your friend, you should at least take the ime to proofread it.
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"It was just his time to move on."
"When it seems that his life just got going."
"He had planned so many times to explore,"
"Or meeting the love of his life."
"Struck down in his prime without a second glance,"
"To fulfill its lifelong dream."
I also want it a bit vague.