regarding some deleted poem...	11-Aug-04/6:47 PM
I like this except for the ending,maybe change the last 4 lines. -8-
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Aug-04/6:53 PM
You just had an orgasm - sure all is rigth w/ the world.This could be better if you added a little flavor(taste,touch,hear,smell or sight)?still decent.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Aug-04/8:06 PM
Really republicans should refrain from any attempts at prose whatsoever...really.
Re: Navy Pier by Doug	11-Aug-04/8:42 PM
Were you afraid to fall in love with a girl unworthy?
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-04/6:23 AM
Nice feeling but the words could be more powerful - I liked it though it could use revision. -7-
Re: The Grand Adjustment by horus8	15-Aug-04/6:26 AM
Do you sell cars?
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-04/2:08 PM
Well done son - I gave it a nine. Could use just a bit of amendment.
Re: I Can't Move On by Sirens_Voice	15-Aug-04/4:39 PM
the ending is good - try a little amending though. -8-
Re: The 80's by wilco	21-Aug-04/11:10 PM
I like the thought behind the lyrics - very nostalgic,yet depressing in a certain way.
Re: A Stitch In Time by Dovina	22-Aug-04/8:52 PM
You captured a moment of us all. Very well wrighten.-9-
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-04/5:25 PM
I do like this particular poem,but I really love the idea behind it.It could be awesome with just a bit of revision. -9-
Re: Internal Dialogue (Mental Cock-Slapping & Anal Discipline) by DreamerSupreme	28-Aug-04/7:19 PM
What is wrong with you?Was this an ode to yourself? Either way it really - truly sucks!Are you a confused 13 year old who's been molested by a gang of Eagle Scouts?Try something besides poetry for your venting. Considering this ranting poem,I believe your the mayor of Dimsville!
Re: Surfer by INTRANSIT	28-Aug-04/7:23 PM
Thought of back when and salt blue ocean....very nice.
Re: Andrew by Spindle	28-Aug-04/9:16 PM
I look into his eyes and I'm tossed and bound I bury my face into her breast and want to masterbate and live forever I kiss her lips and pull away just so I can suck ass again.
Re: Two Basic Forces by dougsoderstrom	1-Sep-04/7:38 PM
Is this poetry?
Re: Swimming in Space & Fishing for the Luridness Monster by SupremeDreamer	2-Sep-04/6:36 PM
Quite lame.
Re: Let your heart roam free by Leah11	2-Sep-04/7:33 PM
Like the feel and honesty - structure could be better. -8.5-
Re: Friend Ship by ChefKSP	8-Sep-04/4:22 PM
Are you for real?
Re: Lost Soul by ChefKSP	8-Sep-04/4:26 PM
No offence - but please try a different form of expression.Poetry is just not your cup of tea.