Re: A FIRST POEM FOR MY GRANDCHILd by massangel62	2-Aug-04/7:00 PM
Very sweet, nice for family, but it's slightly cheesy and obvious, but poems are for lots of things and I think it does well what it's suppose to be doing, but as a poem, well...
Re: A poem crafted from the depths of my heart by capachijim	2-Aug-04/7:02 PM
I was expecting some dribble here about love and falling and you know that annoying crap, but wow, not even...
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-04/10:21 PM
I normally hate anything that has ventricle in the title, but...
Re: nice day by New Life Drug	2-Aug-04/11:07 PM
i know this sounds dumb, but i like how you said it, i just don't like the subject, i wish there was a subjective vote and an objective vote...
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-04/11:08 PM
that was rad!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-04/11:11 PM
i seem to only vote on things i like, a fear of being mean of telling someone no...well this doesn't have much to do with your poem, but i love the whole brando going to the moon type thing...
Re: You Can't Kill A Dead Man! by dougsoderstrom	2-Aug-04/11:26 PM
but you can kill a dead man, as long as he's talking...yes i have an aversion to the caps button and i'm a uh three dot whore, it's got some kind of name within the whole grammar thing, but its late and stuff so...
Re: Dan by dougsoderstrom	2-Aug-04/11:30 PM
i liked this, i love the whole dot thing, the "dan" "fan" "plan" thing, the whole trying to describe going beyond self, that's always positive.
Re: Life On Earth by dougsoderstrom	2-Aug-04/11:33 PM
i thought this was cool, who gave this a one, that's total bs, yeah some people hate rhymes, but this had some substance and connection to the every day person who feels trapped...i hoped i spelled rhyme right.
Re: Summer crush by sk8rs_rule_all	3-Aug-04/7:13 AM
Since you are 16 I like this, because I appreciate the feelings it give me, I like that you can look at things that happen in life (even the stuff that's bad, but isn't it all about perspective) with a sense of humour...some people are 35 and don't get that.
Re: I cant stand you by sk8rs_rule_all	3-Aug-04/7:16 AM
I totally feel you here, but you know I thought it was about a parent...you are funny. Your poems are very direct.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Aug-04/10:37 AM
I thought SARs was mainly in China, but I guess that wouldn't rhyme.
Re: Consolation by Dovina	4-Aug-04/1:02 AM
John Williams has an Oscar your work reminds me of his...
Re: May Monday Explanation by MacFrantic	4-Aug-04/1:43 AM
I liked the not sorry part, I liked the whole thing, but the end changed it to being just a "my life is so horrible" poem into something else, it could be the horrible life poem with a twist if you view the person in this poem as so out of their mind that their sorry doesn't matter, because they can't apologize for something they have no control over. So it's some kind of last grasp at control, a failed one.
Re: Love, Fair by MacFrantic	4-Aug-04/1:50 AM
Goddamn you for not sucking, I want to mock someone this morning.
Re: DIDN'T I SAY by massangel62	6-Aug-04/12:24 PM
Massangel, I don't know what to say about this, your poems remind me of another time, not a bad time, but another time. I think people aren't getting you and are judging your work by a different kind of perspective, I get what you are doing and I appreciate it. Is this about you getting published or about you sharing your experiences, because if it's the latter, it's nice work, it's not always about being modern and technical, sometimes it is just about sharing, and that can be nice :) I hope I didn't sound patronizing, I'm sincere. Cat
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Aug-04/12:47 PM
I can't comment on the technical aspect of it, but the subject matter just feels very selfish, very self absorbed, the person in this poem is angry at one person, because they don't love them, but they are leading this other person on...It's just very pop song lyric like. It needs to be deeper, you can make this something interesting, I think you could rewrite this experience (don't know if its real or not) into something more than just a "Two Lovers" by Mary Wells and make it into more of a "Next Lifetime" by Erykah Badu, not that Badu's lyrics are perfect, but it's a different perspective and maybe that's what's needed here.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Aug-04/12:57 PM
I think it should end at "cliches".
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Aug-04/3:27 PM
you haven't posted anything recently why, your stuff is very interesting. you seem a little touched in the head and i appreciate that.
Re: Mississippi Burnin. by SupremeDreamer	13-Aug-04/8:43 AM
dear unpc friends of the rainbow that is earth, The internet is a wonderful tool, how happy you must be to not be tied to the constraints of society. The thing I fine most fascinating about people who hate PC is that they feel like somehow the dreaded “PC” has some how shackled them and held them back in their lives because they weren’t able to use anti-Semitic, racist, sexist, and homophobic slurs daily without people thinking they were jerks, so they had to completely bottle that frustration deep inside. I completely feel for those individuals that were trapped during the height of PC, because I know that the reason you live on the couch in your mother's den. It is because from 1990 (the beginning of PC) until 2000, you weren't allowed to use a racial slur and that's why you have to live in a neighborhood where people own ten thousand dollar cars. My heart goes out to you, I know those ten years were tough, maybe you should contact a lawyer and maybe you can file some of "couldn't be self realized, because I could use an offensive term when that offending ethnic group/gender/religion stole my job/spot in the college I really, really, wanted to go to/my girlfriend, I couldn't even use anti-Semitisms to complain about my lack of balance in my bank account, woe is me." Maybe you can file that around the time you file a suit against McDonalds for your Atkins diet making you 300 pounds and giving you heart disease… two licks and a coughed up hair ball to you, meow, cat