Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	6-Feb-05/9:14 PM
Terrible, but funny.
Re: Thanks (Dovina) by jroday	6-Feb-05/9:09 PM
The first verse of this poem is the most tender and nicely worded sentiment I have read in a long time. Some people on this site will say I’m just swooning to a line. Let them talk, because I believe you. I’ll give them their only satisfaction by saying that the second verse is a bit cliché, but it too is something I believe you mean. The third verse matches the first in warmth and tenderness, and the line, “even when you don’t understand” is perfect. Thank you jroday, you’ve been through a lot and come through strong.
Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	6-Feb-05/8:50 PM
Jessicazee is with me part way; Wilco is part way there; Shuushin’s Ogden Nash comparison is not a bad thing; Zodiac is befuddled as usual; but by Job, you’ve got it. At least what you say is lighthearted and heavy-handed is what I meant. I suppose it’s ok for people to get what they see in a poem, but it’s gratifying when somebody sees it the way I do. I see your point about the last four lines.
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	5-Feb-05/8:20 AM
Admittedly.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	5-Feb-05/8:17 AM
You see, since it's not obvious to you, the cliche "one of a kind" is grosely and always wrong for obvious reasons.
Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	5-Feb-05/8:15 AM
I predict I’ll say something about how irrelevant it is of you to say that because you’ve heard that "poetess" and "girly" are not opposing that makes this merely a girly poem. It’s the kind of thing you can be counted on to say. What I predict I’ll say is not at all unimaginable.
Re: DUI Violation by amateurR	4-Feb-05/4:47 PM
Good. Try omitting "Driving along fast" and "my" in the line above.
Re: love's jealousy by singinkygal	4-Feb-05/12:57 PM
A few too many words. Try scratching - love's, fills (make it fill or scratch fills my body) hatred springs to life, evil, again unreservedly, devastation.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	4-Feb-05/12:46 PM
I'm hurt that you don't care whether I hate trolls. Maybe I'll write a paradelle showing how despicable trolls are, and I'll do it to change your opinion on whether I care. Would I then be showing? No, I'd just be telling in another way. I like telling, and I like showing, and I hate rules, including somebody's list entitled, "tools of the poet."
Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee	4-Feb-05/7:48 AM
Good story.
Re: a comment on Girly by Dovina	4-Feb-05/7:44 AM
Did you not want to like it because you've been there. Oh, the last two lines are what it's about. :(
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	4-Feb-05/7:41 AM
I am so very, very sorry that you are so mistreated by racist nentwined. Go for empowerment! Stand up for your rights, maybe stand nude in a stadium for your rights. But I wont join you in that cause. If I'm nude in a stadium it is for reasons the man in the stands knows.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	4-Feb-05/7:35 AM
Zodiac: "It reflects poorly on your kind." Dovina: Yeasts are good at what they do.
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	4-Feb-05/7:30 AM
Your paraphrasing does not come across with its usual inaccuracy and therefore impossibility of apt response. No, I agree with your summary given its summary nature. My recent response was to richa’s comment and deviated from yours, and for that you unjustly poked criticism. Now to your most recent comment. The point of the poem is not to convince people of something. It is not to criticize their faith. It is to express feelings I personally have about God. The fact that my understanding of Him differs from those people who find Him a loving and caring God who wants to make His people happy by sending them to heaven via disaster is not my point. I want to understand God as He is, and this poem, I believe, is a step in that direction.
Re: a comment on Pictures of June by wilco	3-Feb-05/9:52 PM
I heard a story once about a girl who was raped and her name was June and the time from October to June was nine months, and it kinda goes along if I stretch it a bit, kinda the way a genius does when a step above the other guys. Of course I wouldn't brag or anything like that.
Re: Pictures of June by wilco	3-Feb-05/4:07 PM
Well, I'm still not gittin' past the first line. Punctuation and capitalization more user-friendly might help, what with line 2 not really bein' a sentence an' all. An' ah never seen a brainwave collapse on no film. Guess I'm kina simple that way.
Re: a comment on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina	3-Feb-05/3:58 PM
And a rock so heavy he cannot lift it. Does that make Him flawed?
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	3-Feb-05/3:55 PM
Please, let's not rehash that. It's been gone over more on poemranker than a lone bitch beagel in a pack of males.
Re: Pictures of June by wilco	3-Feb-05/12:20 PM
Having trouble following this. Postulates are not proven, maybe that's the point. I like the first line.
Re: Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	3-Feb-05/12:14 PM
What a poet will do to stick to a form!