Re: a comment on Fastso by Dovina	5-Mar-05/10:53 AM
Sorry to disappoint, but your perception of my repentance is false. Both of my Hunger poems are, in my opinion, not bullshit, but honest commentary on many kinds of hunger and how they intermingle – a hierarchy of hunger. Speaking of intermingling, with so many tadpoles in the pond these days, each belching four pustuled burps before they grow legs or die, perhaps an old cowfrog is a bit of a novelty, wouldn’t you say, Bull?
Re: a comment on Woman on the Stairs by James Rykelangeli	5-Mar-05/7:28 AM
No, Goad, this staircase newel Indeed brightens night like a jewel Its chandelier stars And mystery like mars Bespatter your thoughts to the cesspool
Re: A Dozen Roses by jroday	4-Mar-05/12:29 PM
The sentiment is hearthelt. The idea of relating sentiment to 12 roses is good. The 9th and 10th are especially nice. But too many lines try too hard to rhyme, and try too little for expression of the feelings you have. Line 2, for example, rhymes with Line 1, but should do more.
Re: March 3,2005/I lost someone by RION12	4-Mar-05/12:22 PM
Then send it to Danny's friends. It's not polished enough for general audiances.
Re: 6 bloody mary's/2 cups of Rossi by Crakyamuni	4-Mar-05/12:16 PM
after 6 drinks and whatever else, yeah, why not?
Re: Woman on the Stairs by James Rykelangeli	4-Mar-05/7:44 AM
Rich with language. Although it evokes grand visions of the night, I look for meaning and shall perhaps look again.
Re: a comment on Hunger 2 by Dovina	4-Mar-05/7:27 AM
Of course there can be no dialog. We both knew that from the start. Even though the general structure I’ve shown here is accepted as good practice there can be no admission of this. And of course I knew before starting that you’d resort to terms like “ladies world” and “cognitive level above that of a pea” to impress an air of authority. I will not convince you otherwise, so I won’t try.
Re: a comment on Hunger 2 by Dovina	3-Mar-05/6:47 PM
‘food’ could be a reserved word in this version of LISP, a defined function in a higher file such as acad.lsp, a function called by an internal call that yields nil or not-nil, a command in the application, or it could be a global variable. The code is easier to maintain because it’s easier to follow. It’s easy to change a variable name and all of the comments that address it using a simple text search and replace. That’s how it’s done in the real world of nil beards.
Re: a comment on Hunger 2 by Dovina	3-Mar-05/4:23 PM
Thank you for a remarkable commentary on my poem, my ability as a LISP programmer, and on LISP itself. Particularly interesting is your pointing out that all of my variables are global since they are not defined locally. I suppose you are right since no variables are used in the hunger function - not locally as they would be with (defun hunger eat sleep crap . . .) or somesuch, nor are any global variables assumed by not being so defined. So that tells me about how much you know about LISP. Also, it is very common for a programmer to comment on a close paren, especially if several lines separate it from its open paren. As you may not know, every open paren in LISP must be followed eventually by a close paren which completes the command. Placing the close paren on a new line with a comment telling which open paren it closes is therefore good practice and makes the code easier to maintain. I tried to keep the program simple, avoiding parameter passing and uncommon commands that manage linked lists, coordinate searches and the like, but I see it is not simple enough. Of course nobody can dispute your expertise in swellington poemes and your ability to determine failure in all things poetic and LISP.
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	3-Mar-05/7:06 AM
I like the audiance sarcasm in the first verse - a funny twist.
Re: A Time by DevilBuni	3-Mar-05/6:59 AM
I agree. Verse 4 has potential - could become the poem.
Re: We Have Nothing to Talk About by jessicazee	3-Mar-05/6:57 AM
Good. I think you could make it stronger by cutting a few words - "trance" - 3 adjectives in a row. And a line break after "secrets." "so" in line 7
Re: a comment on Advertising says: by Dovina	3-Mar-05/6:45 AM
It always bothers me when people say they eat healthy food, as if the health of the food matters. What they think they are eating is healthful food. That’s what advertisers are promoting in products like breakfast cereal. On the other side are McDonalds and its look-alikes that promote tasty food which usually contains too much saturated fat (which could add to body weight but not necessarily; that’s another use of the word “fat.”). The dichotomy is tasty fat verses healthful food. So it goes throughout the 31 lines (counting blank lines) and 44 words – dichotomous pairs.
Re: a comment on The Gentleman by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	2-Mar-05/10:47 AM
Does yak shit crawl? Of course not. Everyone knows that. He knows that, just as he knows the difference between a training braw and his gentleman wearing it.
Re: a comment on Advertising says: by Dovina	2-Mar-05/10:33 AM
Suckers all. I fall for the Budweiser Bears. They make me want to drink Bud.
Re: a comment on Advertising says: by Dovina	2-Mar-05/10:31 AM
You are at your best when you do the pathos, or would you prefer I said, “worst.” (Curry + White Car + Home by 9) /3 = two hours typing, then TV (Ennui + TV) / 2 = Sleep. (Toothache + Beer) /2 = Sweet Dreams +/- 20% contingency
Re: a comment on It’s the Management by Dovina	2-Mar-05/6:42 AM
It's neither plagiarism nor indecent to write a story told to me in the first person, but you already knew that.
Re: spiders and butterflies by Mona Lisa	1-Mar-05/12:03 PM
The last verse seems overdone, otherwise pretty good.
Re: a comment on For Junior by PodPoet	1-Mar-05/11:57 AM
Beware of the inevitable letdown after a high. Beware of comments like the one below. Beware of 10-votes that are not meant as 10. And most of all, beware of writing poetry.
Re: a comment on Hunger 2 by Dovina	1-Mar-05/11:50 AM
Can you read this? Really?