regarding some deleted poem...	20-Jan-05/6:37 AM
Haunting. As usual, your language carries it. Don't know if I like the line "what is revealed may not be what is truly there." What is truly there after all?
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Jan-05/11:04 AM
If you mean a blind person, then the beginning is good. But the conclusion eludes me, since we must see or feel or hear the beautiful thing before we can know its beauty.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Jan-05/7:00 AM
She sees blood and remembers. How true the memory is, how false the fact.
Re: Rustic Rainstorm by MacFrantic	22-Jan-05/7:05 AM
I like the cow pies turning ripe in the rain and their smell in the wind, a fresh, good smell. I've had my own private thunderstorm and liked it very much.
Re: Life is my agony by Prince of Void	22-Jan-05/1:27 PM
Oh, for God's sake get over it! Have another drink. Write another poem. Go for a walk. Do something! This sitting around feeling sorry for yourself, well it's selfish and wrong. If I were on the stool next to you I'd buy you a drink.
Re: #28 by Lifeboatman	22-Jan-05/1:30 PM
Is Shakespeare your tutor? I don't like most of his sonets and I don't like this, even if it is hard to write.
Re: Homophobic Self-Help Poem. (For the men who drive a mustang) by SupremeDreamer	22-Jan-05/1:36 PM
Well, as long as you write about and don't do it that's good. It happens I am a woman and my tits do sag, but ya know what, I wear a bra and stand erect and go about as if I had something worthwhile to do besides write and write about sadness.
Re: fly me away by damianlow	22-Jan-05/1:41 PM
Better than most of the pop lyrics I hear. I'd like it get into the kinda mood of "Bridge Over Troubled Waters" a little more though.
Re: Poetry translation(M. Tsvetayeva) by Olya	22-Jan-05/1:44 PM
Some very strange language this. Too many lines don't make sense.
Re: Birth by Caducus	24-Jan-05/3:51 PM
Wow, there's several ways to take this. What man, after knowing the warm squeeze of a woman's womb would desire anything more. Well, being a man you can return.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Jan-05/3:58 PM
Somebody told me recently that poetry is a language game. Well this game gives me a lot of tension, like a turnbuckle tightening its ropes. You have an artful, but tensioning, way of bring the most remote scenes into a steel contraption - i.e. verse 3
Re: Ode 2 2Pac by PodPoet	25-Jan-05/10:32 AM
I, too, know nothing of the rap scene. But you've shown it to me here and it makes sense. I'll listen closer next time I hear it.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Jan-05/10:36 AM
The first verse flows well. The rest seems unrelated, redundant even, supposition. I'd rather see snow flakes than "would be" flakes.
Re: Lonely People by april fool	25-Jan-05/10:57 AM
Wish I were schizophrenic. Sounds like fun. Seem better, though, to make it personal, not pitting it inside their heads, but talk about how it is inside the head of a schizophrenic.
Re: Memphis Skyline by wilco	26-Jan-05/10:35 AM
I like a good song and hate to complain in the middle of a hill-billy gittin-back-tagether tune, but if you remember all this in Verse 1, why don't you remember any of it in Verse 3? An' ain't it presumptious of y'all askin' her ta cancel her New Years plans and all. You'uns stay with us, hear. It ain't all that bad.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jan-05/11:28 AM
I have to read this several times to resalize the sequence of events. Would prefer to know a glass of wine is falling in the first verse. A riddle it is. Speaking from the glass's pov is quite nice however.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jan-05/11:49 AM
Do you mean "Tucked into an ice sculpture"? mollusk? chiseled?
Re: Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray by PsydewaysTears	27-Jan-05/11:58 AM
Anything with suicide in it deserves a zero, but because of Verse 4 and the first half of Verse 6, you get a 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jan-05/12:08 PM
Aparently it was worth all of this and all of another what?--fifty more years. Who knows what erotic pleasure lies in a sixty-year-old's bed?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jan-05/12:30 PM
Yes, funny. Mascara goes on eyelashes and eyebrows, not on skin.