INTRANSIT
on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy
7 Nov 2005, 3:13 PM
wow. I'm waaaaaay off. I thought it was a litany against blacks! HA! I gotta get out more.
You're a Black Irishman? Do you hate yourself?
Oh, you are upset because I gave your poem "politics" a goose-egg. I just thought you sucked and LL Cool J did it better. :(
Thank you.
That's 'cause I eat mostly corn. But really I think it's quite beautiful and funny. If you promise not to tell...-10-
Oh, you are upset because I deleted a comment. I just thought you were a rambling idiot. :(
"That's what us robins do." lol. It's the only poem I posted this week, which makes it the best. lol. And I don't find much poop in what you're saying.
The question always has to be asked, when exactly did a separatiion of friends really happen? It's not when one of them walks away, but sometime before, maybe a long time before the other even suspected it. "When did you walk away?" is a good question.
"The most logical interpretation is not always right". No it's just logical.
Forgive me if you feel I pooped on your poem but that's what us robins do.
I actually think it's some of the best stuff you've written this week.
The most logical interpretation is not always right, that's what I always say, and go on looking, to the frustration of nits and nit-pickers. Maybe the robin also ate some berries.
An amusing little story. RED and brown? Does the bird have colon cancer?
Would be stronger with a few words scratched - carbonless, "is" in the title, becoming, invincibility.
Not cinquain. You know what's funny. If you search cinquain at dictionary.com it causes a glitch in which it can't find any definitions but then offers twice the exact same spelling as an alternative and if you click those it just brings up the same response but if you type cinquains (the plural form) than you get the definition for cinquain. Maybe it's the Smythe-Klein Effect.
The hideous and groundless thing here is your insistance on dwelling in a side issue of no importance. What will happen when you wake up and realize?
You say that because you are looking at one small side issue of the arguement, ignoring 90% of what I said.
Much better than your piece High? Coo. Uses plenty of lively language that reminds me of dodgy cocktail bars. I'm not sure about the exclamation mark and the capitalization of jazz nights at the end, bit too much exclamation for my likings, anyway good effort.
I know you use your poetry to convey your thoughts and experiences and wish to make an accurate account of your life and times and everything, but did you know that in 61 poems you've asked an astonishing 83 questions? Do you plan on ever answering anything?
Not haiku.
DOVINA: The black race is the most different from the white race.
ZODIAC: No, we're still fighting.
DOVINA: Whatever, I know I'm not racist, while you think you might be racist. By my logic, you're racist and I'm not.
ZODIAC: I can't load 'Racism' so let me ask you here: Do you understand how given ANY TWO GROUPS AT ALL, one of them HAS to be superior, on average, to the other, on average, at any given thing? -=Dark_Angel=-'s right, if you don't get that, you're racist.
DOVINA: If I'm racist, I'm only racist IN FAVOR of cute blacks.
ZODIAC: That is not a plausible defence.
DOVINA: Blaaaaaaaaat.
ZODIAC: Whatever.
If you really had integrity, you'd do it. As things stand you've Hitler's integrity, clinging to the death to some groundless, hideous, arbitrary notion. When you wake up and find what a bunker your ideology's reduced to, you're going to shoot yourself and everyone else in the room.