Wow! What a comeback. What's next "I know you are but what am I"? Oh, You are a dick. Try denying that one Richard. <:o

What is ironic is you think it's racist when the poem is actually about perpetuating racism. In this way I really mean it. The first word is "Rid" as in get rid of all these stereotypes. To use words like "Nigger" as only a kick against censorship is not good poetry it's just being a Richard. Dick.

Saying "black self-image" is racist. Black standard is the popular image they generate. When black people stop calling each other Pimp, Nigga, Ho, etc. and stop refering to white folks as the man, when rappers stop rapping about how great it is to be a Gangsta, Pimp, Dealer, Criminal, etc. Then we'll talk. I never denied being racist at some level. We all are.

Why did I call you a teenager? The average grown-up gives up on such pipe dreams as rock stardom and instead focuses on sounding smarter by learning multisyllable words and talking down to teenagers. We envy your innocence but alas at 17 it won't be long before you join the throng of us fuddy-duddies. But really kid, you don't learn to skate by throwing yourself down the halfpipe and not expect to get hurt and ridiculed a little. Get yourself a collection of great poetry book or two and read it and study poetic methods (I mean without looking it up. What's an onomatopoeia or alliteration? You use a lot of one and in this poem maybe should use some of the other.) You'd be surprised how much of poetry is just a calculated trick. Does this sound better to you? In the music studio in my mind, the window vibes to every beat every rhyme and reason strung by bass strumming, humming, buzzing in my teeth lead guitar sings and wails and sails I kiss the mic. A taste of metal and cocaine Pyrotechnics blaze, my lungs bellow hordes of chords into the sky and from the crowd a thunder cloud for the band, their hands give praise We are gods of the stage till I awake to the quiet rage of reality. Just tricks of poetry. Rhyme, Metaphor, Symbolism, alliteration, etc. Bye the way some of your poems are pretty good. I just wish you knew why.

Above anything else what tells the reader that you are about 13 is the appalling spelling. This is nothing to do with the reader and I would have thought a simple spellcheck is within anyone's 'intellect'.

do you think black people intrinsically have a black self-image involving slavery and pimping. Now that is racist.

Oh, you are a rambling idiot. <:(

Actually I am 17, Im sorry If a person with a higher intelect, as yourself, can not accept a poem that tells a story, that you < a reader> does not understand or knows about. bye the way your poems are pretty good, and im not trying to be negative about the whole thing. i just dont know why you asked if u was 13?

My poem includes words such as pimp, bitches, cocaine and motherfucker. If this is what reminds you of 5 year olds then I would suggest you get some serious psychiatric help. If you're replying to the comment I made on your poem. I would suggest you click the little green reply link in the corner of my comment beneath your poem. Post whatever remark your teenage mind can muster but for God sakes stop stalking everyone who says something you don't like. Ya sicko.

I think it's when you use K-Y jelly and you forget to wash it off and it dries and hardens.

Okay, if you'll fight the system and give a comment, here's your shin-kick: Truckers should get double-taxed because without them bridges could be half as strong.

Don't worry. Your first reaction is expected and somewhat intended. It only means you're normal. Irony can do that in a poem. It is kinda racist for a white dude (me) to criticize black people for their self image. So you're not waaaaaay off.