Dovina
on Close To The Beginning by RawPunkGirl
14 Nov 2005, 5:34 PM
So few poems end well. Life should end well, why not poems. Are all poets working against what should be?
I'd like to cash in on that guarantee: "you are a fool to consider me beautiful."
Half-way or not, it seems heaven should not be the goal.
I wrote this a long time ago, when I still half-way believe in Christianity. That was about 12 years ago.
Nice, to put on his pillow at each season's beginning.
My compass points more often to magnetic love.
You have expressed the Christian view of heaven where the goal is to get there. May I ask why so much more of the Bible is dedicated to glorifying God than to being glorified in heaven.
good job with the science lesson. obviously the only reason there even needs to be a distinction of true north is because of the magnetic north of the compass. good thing the figurative heart compass points to true love and not just magnetic love, huh?
Clever, really, the various ways it lands when spun.
Yes
That doesn't work either. A compass points to magnetic north, which in my part of the world is about 16 degrees east of true north. Will you now say that he knew the magnetic declination?
beyond hearing the phrase "the face that launched a thousand ships" i havent read the poem to go a long with it. so if the rest of the poem has anything to do with original than its coincidence. i was hardly trying to pass off the line as my own invention but merely referencing it as a starting point for my own thoughts.
i hope it wasnt too hard to get that out, and it's fine that you think so, i'll agree its not my best work. it was posted awhile ago, and written long before that. but there is a sudden surge in interest for whatever reason.
The last line seems anti-theme. Being consumed and pushing don't quite go together.
A Right Brain cannot get this I know, but reading your poems quickens the synapses, releasing the fluids, like squeezing blood out of silicone. Never change your style, only grammar sometimes and maybe the occasional hint of logic.
If I were to put a hundred and twenty anthropologists in a bag. Forty believing there was such thing as race and eighty believing there was not. How many anthropologists would I have to pull out to be sure of at least two agreeing. In the light of this is your correspondence with DA really worth a 'at least we agree... that is more than your average'?
ALChemy
replying on not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee
14 Nov 2005, 10:49 AM
We must not forget his turn in gay porn in Batman Forever.
plagiarism
n 1: a piece of writing that has been copied from someone else and is presented as being your own work 2: the act of plagiarizing; taking someone's words or ideas as if they were your own